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Pato
Contributed by
jyssvw22
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Friday, 27th March 2009 @ 09:37:49 AM in AEST
Topic:
oops
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In the sunlight
you shine
On a winters night
you radiate
In my arms
you are finally mine
together we combine
to make love real
to stop time
to steal
heaven from hell
flowers from their fields
the beauty from your eyes
the plain truth from the dirty lies
_________
___
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jyssvw22
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2009-03-27 09:37:49]
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Re: Pato
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by shelby on
Friday, 27th March 2009 @ 10:25:35 AM AEST
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Very pretty write, short and to the point.
The only thing that was a bit off from me was the line
to steal
Heaven from Hell
that just did not make much sense to me but it is your expression and poem.
Have a great day
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Re: Pato
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by Jenni_K on
Friday, 27th March 2009 @ 02:22:55 PM AEST
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Beautiffuly written...
"to steal
heaven from hell"
My interpretation of this is...err... hell is supposed to be a bad place...wrong doings etc.. and in those wrong doing one can find 'Heaven'...meaning pleasurable things..
In any case, I did enjoy this very much..
Jenni
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Re: Pato
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 28th March 2009 @ 03:21:35 PM AEST
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JYSS!! so nice to be reading you once again. Your perception, metaphors and
beauty of language did not disappoint. There is such an overwhelming passion in
this that delivers its power on the wings of angels.
"to steal heaven from hell", is not a bad thing. It's making the most glorious and
beautiful moments out of the most hopeless and desperate situations one could
imagine. Emotion flies so tenderly within your words, like a delicate hug you never
wish to be freed of, you know? Glorious!
Masterfully done, jyss, as always. :)
~ Breezy
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