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Venom
Contributed by
shelby
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Wednesday, 25th March 2009 @ 10:44:57 PM in AEST
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You prance around, looking down your nose.
Be careful the rain showers may drown you one day.
You acting like you are the classy one
maybe a classy first class ass, oh yes you are.
You preach one thing, through lying lips, lined with poison.
Turn around and another face turns back,
a game player, true in your right, pretending not
I see through you, into the soul of your venom, poison.
Sit upon your thrown, throwing stones from your glass house windows.
A shattered soul inside, a scared little control issued woman,
condemning the poor, belittling the homeless
yet you are the mighty queen, dumb struck with martyrdom,
and playing your games, always a game........
You will soon know, you are not my queen,
I am queen unto myself,
you judge and claim there is no God, no devil
well my dear when I look at your smugness
I see the venom and a devil walking in disguise.
I can honestly say I am done, and I really do not even like you................
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shelby
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Re: Venom
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by Loende on
Wednesday, 25th March 2009 @ 10:56:28 PM AEST
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*WHEW*
Goodness. That was a while coming, I would bet. And even with that much anger, you controlled it well.
"well my dear when I look at your smugness
I see the venom and a devil walking in disguise."
I can unfortunately relate to these very same words, all too much. I need to say such things as well. I hope that you feel better for unburdening yourself.
Love,
~dawn |
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Re: Venom
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by venkat on
Wednesday, 25th March 2009 @ 11:08:31 PM AEST
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O Lady in angry mood!...how beautiful is thy expression..
fires from thy eyes will surely burn down the devil waking in disguise and make her ashes......
O.k my friend, you have given a perfect picture of her charecter and her venomous nature...welldone.
hugs and love.. venkat |
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Re: Venom
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 25th March 2009 @ 11:10:28 PM AEST
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Holy crap, Shall!!!!! Excellent way to dish it out. Can I borrow this sometime? I love the attitude in this but am sorry you have to go through this ****.
Take care,
Tim |
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Re: Venom
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by Voice of the Silent on
Wednesday, 25th March 2009 @ 11:24:28 PM AEST
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Very emotionative but I really liked the last lines of the final stanza great write
hope to read more soon
-kelly |
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Re: Venom
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by emystar on
Wednesday, 25th March 2009 @ 11:37:07 PM AEST
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You go girl. Now you're talkin like me.
Good work.
Huggs, luv, smiles,
emy |
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Re: Venom
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 26th March 2009 @ 03:09:55 PM AEST
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honesty! i love it! the frankness in this was great. well said!
-phil |
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Re: Venom
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by elle on
Friday, 27th March 2009 @ 07:52:24 AM AEST
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better to let strong feelings like these out in the context of your art, in the presence of your
friends, than to suffer a fate of negativity & risk becoming as unappealling as this other
person is. . . genuinely impressive how life continuely shows us what we do not want to
be. hugs. peace & every good thing. elle |
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Re: Venom
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 27th March 2009 @ 09:19:55 AM AEST
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That was a good poetic vent!
I hope it helped. |
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Re: Venom
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 28th March 2009 @ 04:22:46 PM AEST
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I've said it before and I'll say it again. I will ALWAYS want you on MY side when the
chips fall. You wield your pen with such perfect animosity. I envy your remarkable
ability to deliver a 'zing' with a poetic flare. This person sounds miserable, poor soul.
We can only hope that eventually those who are evil will see the madness for what it is.
Unfortunately, that's not human nature, is it?
Well done sweet girl!
*hugs*
~ Breezy
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Re: Venom
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by MoonlightKiss on
Monday, 30th March 2009 @ 02:44:43 PM AEST
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| wow that was really good. i can write poetry well but i can't write an angry poem to save my life. you really put your feelings into it. great job. |
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Re: Venom
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by 12161216 on
Friday, 3rd April 2009 @ 06:50:19 PM AEST
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| That was perfect. I can very much relate to this. Great job :) |
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Re: Venom
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by ingeniusidiot on
Monday, 6th April 2009 @ 08:29:18 AM AEST
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Once again I am glad that I am not on the receiving end of your anger....I have been there once and I never want to be in that position ever again. But once again this was brilliantly written.
Rich |
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