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A Star Came Down
Contributed by
lnnie
on
Wednesday, 25th March 2009 @ 05:34:11 PM in AEST
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Someone pulled the Stars down last night
wrapped up the Moon in bubble-wrap,
Night itself was eclipsed
from horizon to horizon.
The Stars settled in your eyes;
the Moon in your hair;
and Night became ours.
That day was expunged from calendars
Orion's Belt snapped;
Andromeda strained,
pouring down smiles
into the fading Dark.
It's You.
That's How Much.
I have put away
Similes and Metaphors;
these bow to
The Verisimilitudes.
No more smiles to invent
after yours.
All broken hearts mended now.
It's You.
That's How Much.
Time too
is
suspended.
I have rolled up
my Heart-Break Carpet
and put it away.
Copyright ©
lnnie
... [
2009-03-25 17:34:11]
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Re: A Star Came Down
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by elle on
Wednesday, 25th March 2009 @ 05:50:46 PM AEST
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| Bravo. . .beauty, heh. . . peace. elle |
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Re: A Star Came Down
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 25th March 2009 @ 05:51:12 PM AEST
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Absolutely magnificent! What more can I say?
Even my standard, thank you for an enjoyable read does not suffice because this one just blew me away!
Tim |
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Re: A Star Came Down
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by Loende on
Wednesday, 25th March 2009 @ 06:23:08 PM AEST
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*sigh*
I have rolled up
my Heart-Break Carpet
and put it away.
Gosh, this was so enchanting. And uplifting. Especially since I'm having a day that started out so low. Thank you, thank you, thank you. Could you teach me how to roll up mine?
Be well,
~Loende |
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Re: A Star Came Down
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by shanat on
Wednesday, 25th March 2009 @ 06:38:34 PM AEST
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great stuff! im still wipeing the tears away
please post some more
i to wrote a poem about the stars:))
shanat. |
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Re: A Star Came Down
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by venkat on
Wednesday, 25th March 2009 @ 09:03:10 PM AEST
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yes, yes...this is absolutely beautiful...
I like this imagery..I don't want to praise you.
I would like to read similar excellent poems
from your pen..
blessings :-)venkat |
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Re: A Star Came Down
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by shelby on
Wednesday, 25th March 2009 @ 11:21:48 PM AEST
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Oh my heck this is so darn pretty it made me cry.
This I will say moved my soul, beautiful work.
Hugs
Michelle
who also loved the ending that is solid! Strong
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Re: A Star Came Down
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 26th March 2009 @ 03:03:04 PM AEST
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yes, very good indeed. some great language use and it flowed nicely. good work.
-phil |
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Re: A Star Came Down
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by Shade on
Friday, 27th March 2009 @ 07:16:32 PM AEST
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Someone pulled the Stars down last night
wrapped up the Moon in bubble-wrap
Right from the beginning I was entranced. |
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