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Supernova
Contributed by
kye
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Sunday, 22nd March 2009 @ 08:11:34 PM in AEST
Topic:
oops
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I tethered night
With nimble fingers
Turned iconic pages
From eons assembled
The poetry of worlds
I cast a soul of ribbon
Above the bleakest north
Crossing light empyreal
To guide those most forlorn
I spun from ancient crystals
The planes of moonless sand
Unwrinkled by a thousand miles
Crowned by a smooth expanse
I shouldered up the heavens
From strapless gulfing clouds
Then liquefied their essence
To scatter on the ground
In the velocity of an unknown star
Lies the necklace of a million worlds
From the death of a luminescent core
Rises the creation of life
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kye
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2009-03-22 20:11:34]
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Re: Supernova
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by venkat on
Sunday, 22nd March 2009 @ 09:42:53 PM AEST
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"I spun from ancient crystals The planes of moonless sand..I shouldered up the heavens From strapless gulfing clouds
Then liquefied their essenceTo scatter on the ground...From the death of a luminescent core Rises the creation of life.."..
you are wonderfully poetic. written brilliant lines with some inter connectivity of thoughts...On the whole it provides beautiful images connected to the story of creation..
I have enjoyed its excellent poetic beauty and the flow of well sculptured words..
love and blessings..:-)venkat
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Re: Supernova
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 22nd March 2009 @ 11:30:07 PM AEST
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*gasps*
This is, simply put, great. To look at the sky and "scribble" this, that is what inspiration is all about and this was truly inspirational, especially knowing where that inspiration came from.
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Re: Supernova
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 23rd March 2009 @ 09:34:23 AM AEST
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i loved this. it was unique, beautiful and eloquent. not a single boring cliche in sight! a work of art that was a joy to read. well done.
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Re: Supernova
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by lnnie on
Tuesday, 24th March 2009 @ 09:45:16 PM AEST
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I shouldered up the heavens
From strapless gulfing clouds
Then liquefied their essence
To scatter on the ground
Beautiful, just beautiful.
Just finished one like this.
Thank you for your kind words.
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Re: Supernova
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by jesusofholland on
Monday, 1st June 2009 @ 04:24:17 PM AEST
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Your treatment of imagery is an inspiration. I found myself being completely immersed in your words, drifting listlessly through the sky above the beaches and into the heavens.
The third stanza is breathtaking. Truely, it is one of the most gorgeous I've ever read. Immediately after reading, it became committed to my memory.
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Re: Supernova
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by Capian on
Saturday, 5th September 2009 @ 05:01:42 AM AEST
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| Great write! Really enjoyed it! So light but so thoughtful. |
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