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First among equals
Contributed by
Spike
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Tuesday, 17th March 2009 @ 07:37:56 AM in AEST
Topic:
scifi
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I tread through sands of ancient seas
that fell prey to fickle gravity,
and wonder what creatures
swam and fought and died
in the calderas of this doomed world.
I’ll join them soon enough.
The sky is a striking red, with
wisps of horsetails and
giant thunderheads on the horizon.
but the air is thin and poisonous;
the only barrier to choking demise
a face plate and compressed air.
the landscape, so reminiscent of
Old Earth’s deserts and crumbling mesas,
and I feel a stirring of ancient forces here.
alone.
here, alone.
The remnants of my shuttle and crew,
now part of the scarred landscape.
hope.
none.
time.
short.
Still, we got here first.
Copyright ©
Spike
... [
2009-03-17 07:37:56]
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Re: First among equals
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 17th March 2009 @ 01:21:57 PM AEST
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excellent writing once again. so many images and concepts, rolled into this delightful piece. what a talent you have.
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Re: First among equals
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by elle on
Tuesday, 17th March 2009 @ 08:53:31 PM AEST
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Fantastic, Spike. . . Your imagination is so
incredible. Once again a delight to read. . .
elle |
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Re: First among equals
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 17th March 2009 @ 09:08:14 PM AEST
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| Exactly!!!! Exactly!!! Love the way you sum it up with that last line. |
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Re: First among equals
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by shelby on
Tuesday, 17th March 2009 @ 10:07:52 PM AEST
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My friend this is a striking verse, the pic fit well.
and I feel a stirring of ancient forces here alone here alone dang that could give me chills!!
Good work as you always capture upon the page.
Hugs
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Re: First among equals
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 19th April 2009 @ 02:16:14 PM AEST
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Did they indeed? And if so, did it make a difference?
Excellent writing here spike. Your descriptions are so fine. Right down
to the last bit of information shared in that captain's log. No one wants
to die in vain, yeah?
Splendid post, dear poet.
~ Breezy
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