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Better In This Lonlness
Contributed by
lnnie
on
Monday, 16th March 2009 @ 09:48:37 PM in AEST
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I'll not ever know
why your heart turned;
why that door closed.
I'll not know if it was cruelty
or my own frailties.
But even if I knew
it was you
then
how could I reform
you?
Could I convince you that
you and I were best
and that she was
at best
manipulative
and in time
would
take that same heart
that shunned me
and rip it
out and hand it back to you?
How can I predict this
and even if true
would my own anger
accept you back
for you
or only if I did
it would be
an empty victory lap
and not you
I'd want.
If you were in fact not right for me
for whatever reasons there might be
I was right for you only in retrospect
since she had
lain in your bed
she had changed the you
I used to know
into the you
she'd hurt
and that is not the you
I'd want.
In all of this I am the me
I'd always been
the me I love best.
Hurt and harmed
heart-broken
and trembling
I 'm probably a better me
that you are a better you.
Much to ponder here
even
in this lonliness.
Copyright ©
lnnie
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2009-03-16 21:48:37]
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Re: Better In This Lonlness
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 17th March 2009 @ 01:06:29 PM AEST
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an interesting piece. very emotive and clear. i liked it.
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Re: Better In This Lonlness
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by kye on
Tuesday, 17th March 2009 @ 03:48:37 PM AEST
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I wish I could hug you Innie. I truly do.
Their was something in your poem that impressed me so much---
"Hurt and harmed
heart-broken
and trembling
I 'm probably a better me"
It is hard to keep oneself in tact during a lonely heartbreaking time. It seems you have.
Thank you for sharing this will all of us.
Kie
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Re: Better In This Lonlness
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 7th April 2009 @ 11:28:16 PM AEST
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Even in your pain you are oh so creative and I find that simply astounding.
This one had me tearing up with that ol' lump in my throat while simultaneously impressing me with your gift of creative writing.
I hope things have or will get better for you.
Thank you sharing this with the rest of us.
Tim
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