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Self Taught Wounds
Contributed by
lostinmyself
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Saturday, 7th March 2009 @ 10:36:10 PM in AEST
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Broken but breathing
asleep while I'm dreaming
holding on to nothing
to stop myself from screaming
keeling over in sorrow
please save me from tomorrow
I cannot close my eyes
because behind them hides the horror.
I still cannot escape
the loneliness and pain
when I open up my eyes
and the world still looks the same
I cannot sleep for dreaming
in my nightmares I am bleeding
the wounds are all decieving
I'm the only one who sees them.
Bend me over backwards,
break my back, it doesn't matter
inside the pain is all the same
it strikes at me, again and again.
There is no cure for self taught wounds
just lock me up inside this room
please pad the walls and break the lights
and leave me here inside the gloom
let the shadows claim the sun
and shut me off from everyone
perhaps I'll live, perhaps I'll die
either way the pain is gone.
Help me hold myself together
I want to become numb forever
until I can no longer feel
and the loss I know just seems unreal;
please let this all just be a dream
please erase the things that I have seen
and all the tears and all the pain
please, help me become whole again.
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Re: Self Taught Wounds
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by Loende on
Sunday, 8th March 2009 @ 12:14:14 AM AEST
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Broken...but breathing....
JUST KEEP BREATHING.
You never fail to humble me, Kindred Sister. May your pain soon ebb.
Love,
~d |
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Re: Self Taught Wounds
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by emystar on
Sunday, 8th March 2009 @ 01:26:27 AM AEST
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Very sad but awesome writing.
Good work.
Hang tuff, my friend as joy cometh in the morning.
huggs, blessings, healing,
emy |
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Re: Self Taught Wounds
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 8th March 2009 @ 01:58:08 AM AEST
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I suppose, like the ol saying goes, what doesn't kill us makes us stronger. Phyllis I have found that you have always had this "ultimate" caring personality. I could see you saving the world from it's own troubles if it were within your powers. I really mean that. That is part of what makes you great! Whatever is going on in your life I am sure a person such as you does not deserve it. I really do sincerely hope that whatever is causing your pain goes away.
Love your friend,
Tim
Okay, now I can also see you are a perfectionist... so tell me, what is wrong with this poem? Nothing as for as I can see. You are also an awesomely fantastic poetess. So let us be the critics...lol... you know I loves ya, Phyllis. Really, this is some powerful stuff.
Take care and many blessings to you. |
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Re: Self Taught Wounds
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by Oneir8dude on
Sunday, 8th March 2009 @ 01:59:02 AM AEST
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Sparky, You bring tears to my eyes in all I read...
although very sad to me, it is beautifully written...
I am here to bring you smiles, and rest from the norm my dear...
I Hold you in my heart |
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Re: Self Taught Wounds
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by shelby on
Sunday, 8th March 2009 @ 01:59:48 AM AEST
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Yes keep breathing, just breath.
I feel you here and so relate, broken oh yes I know it well. I am glad you posted but am so sad you are this sad.
Hugssss you a tight hugger one
Michelle |
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Re: Self Taught Wounds
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 8th March 2009 @ 05:00:32 PM AEST
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Girlfriend I always LOVE your author's notes. They are so ... I don't know ... just absolutely perfect!
The write, of course is distressing to say the least. I know the inner sorrows that have crowded
your days in the past and I know that sometimes it feels as if you have no one to depend on. I hate
that you must go through that. It's so acutely unfair.
Your writing always takes my breath. The last verse here, though, literally stuns me. Sweetheart,
you take care of yourself. You are such a soft soul, but you have amazing strength and ability!
LOVE this piece, even though it makes me slightly sad. Brilliant work, hun.
*hugs you tight*
~ Breezy
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Re: Self Taught Wounds
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 8th March 2009 @ 05:17:28 PM AEST
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an absolutely engrossing write. it was frank, but strangely fluent and beautiful at the same time. what more can i say? just an incredible emotional experience.
-phil |
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Re: Self Taught Wounds
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by venkat on
Sunday, 8th March 2009 @ 08:59:31 PM AEST
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Undoubtedly you are a talented writer..but the feeling of sadness in this work makes me speechless..I am unable to comment.
sincerely a friendly soul-venkat |
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Re: Self Taught Wounds
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 9th March 2009 @ 08:45:31 AM AEST
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Well now, first thing I had to sit back and just take a couple of breaths. Then, I read it again.
Technically, poems that are raw, unedited, they always have a place in my heart. No excuses are necessary, you didn't hold back and I think that's awsome.
As for the content, this is sad, of course. The depression is deeper than what I have read from you in the past. I'm hoping it's because with each write , you express yourself better. Poetry is often an outlet for you, so all I'll say is this. I always have an ear for you (two even!) and a knack to make you smile on occasion (poke). Lean on your friends lil sis. You've certainly been there for us. Hug. |
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Re: Self Taught Wounds
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by Ess3nc3 on
Wednesday, 11th March 2009 @ 06:20:07 PM AEST
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| Such a beautiful, yet somber piece of literature. The fluidity is undeniably flawless. You are a very talented writer and your rhyming skills are astounding. A very heart-felt poem.. Good work. |
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Re: Self Taught Wounds
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by ladyfawn on
Thursday, 12th March 2009 @ 01:45:33 PM AEST
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beautifully expressed, reaching to this readers core, disturbingly sad yet refreshingly real...
hugs n' love nessa |
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Re: Self Taught Wounds
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by ATG on
Wednesday, 1st April 2009 @ 02:20:05 PM AEST
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| Hello my Telford friend. Hope all is well with you... This poem was epic... It definatley showed alot of pain. The movement of the ryme set a rapid pace to me it expressed a 'sort of' tempo of madness... Anyway thats my interpretation... Anyway .. Peace |
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Re: Self Taught Wounds
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by FleurdeSang on
Tuesday, 21st April 2009 @ 07:04:01 PM AEST
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Oh, Phil...
This ruined me. Such a raw piece, it reaches in and cleaves the heart mercilessly, shredding it to nothing. I know this anguish, have felt its horrid claws in every part of me, destroying... I hope this part is over for you... I hate to see such a beautiful soul go through such a hell. All my love and hope to you, dear friend. Thanks so much for your diligent comments, as always, they are cherished. I am back, for now, :). Glad to see you again, cherie.
Always,
~Stephy.
P.S.- exquisite piece, dear. |
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Re: Self Taught Wounds
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 28th April 2009 @ 08:09:40 AM AEST
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Death, taxes 'n' "self-taught" wounds. All inevitabilities unavoidable. You've captured the latter magnificently in words.
wabl
KenMoore
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Re: Self Taught Wounds
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by pixie on
Thursday, 28th May 2009 @ 06:01:05 PM AEST
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| this is the first poem I have read of yours in a long time and you continue to amaze me, your talent has grown ten fold Phil,sending ((hugs))) to you xxx |
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Re: Self Taught Wounds
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by SirCallower on
Friday, 29th May 2009 @ 02:12:14 AM AEST
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Very nice
you really know how to express how you feel
although its a sad poem
I still enjoyed it :) keep up the good work |
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Re: Self Taught Wounds
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by myheartsvoice on
Saturday, 12th September 2009 @ 09:59:00 AM AEST
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As always, one word shall suffice where
your writting is concerned, ( Brilliant ) as
for your authors notes, i don't waist my time
with those, i'm the stranger in this poetic
uninverse not you, my poetic capacity is but
a spec of stardust amidst the uninverse,
while yours is the universe, it's self . . .
Ben |
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