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Thin Walls
Contributed by
recyclebin
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Friday, 6th March 2009 @ 10:22:53 PM in AEST
Topic:
drugabuse
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Through the thin walls,
I hear,
Slamming doors, broken lies
Muffled anguished cries.
She’s worthy of,
much, much more.
Screaming in my mind,
You don’t know a thing about love,
I want to save you.
The need to protect,
Please let me reach into,
To save you,
From all this neglect.
Screaming in my mind,
Please, can’t one just be kind.
Take my arm,
Let me take you from harm.
Through the thin walls….
I hear,
Slamming doors, broken lies
Muffled anguished cries,
They are worthy of
Much, much more.
You both don’t know a thing about love,
I want to save you
The need to protect.
Please let me reach into,
Save you from all this neglect
Screaming in my mind,
Please, can’t you both just be kind.
Take my arm,
Let me take you from harm.
Through the thin walls….
I hear,
Slamming doors, broken lies
Muffled anguished cries.
She says… I’m worthy of,
Much, much more.
I’m tired of screaming in my mind,
You don’t know a thing about love,
I cant save you.
I have them to protect,
Please don’t reach into,
I don’t love you,
I must save us from this neglect
I’m tired of screaming in my mind,
Please why, couldn’t you have been kind?
Let go of my arm,
I must take them from this harm……..
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Re: Thin Walls
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 6th March 2009 @ 10:32:40 PM AEST
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You got some nice rhythm goin' on here... least that's what this drummer thinks. If it wasn't so late at night I'd have gone over and started makin' some noise because this got me in the mood to start bangin' on the drums.
Nice!
They would make great lyrics. I am thinking that's where you're goin' with this one?
Tis amazing how much abuse some people will put up with... like a life time of!!! At times, this is a sad ****** up world!
Take care and blessings to you.
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Re: Thin Walls
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by shelby on
Saturday, 7th March 2009 @ 04:09:00 AM AEST
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Wow this is such an emotional write, something I understand so well. I felt this deeply.
Hugs
Michelle |
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Re: Thin Walls
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by Jenni_K on
Saturday, 7th March 2009 @ 10:48:27 AM AEST
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Hmmm this brought a tear to my eye...so gut-wrenching what some people have to put up with..or maybe choose to.....
In my island in some of the "uneducated" women's minds.....if a man doesnt beat me..he doesn't love me!! and it's so sad..
Good write, Bin....
Miss Jenni......(smile) |
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Re: Thin Walls
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by 110277 on
Wednesday, 11th March 2009 @ 03:01:34 PM AEST
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it's floating with the drum beats.
i like that contest of not-so-one-meaningness.. it makes an effect deeper and wider.
and the form of repeating lines - it makes it round and ... and it's really a good poem.
thank you for creating this. |
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