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The Lost Souls
Contributed by
ginabelle
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Thursday, 26th February 2009 @ 12:22:25 AM in AEST
Topic:
DarkPoetry
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I am Here.
Timelessly floating through time
Leaving every darkness behind
Only to become intertwined in more blackness,
Or lack of light there is.
Lightly can I feel the pulse
The pulse of the lost souls that live in me
Souls whose goals were never given the chance to see life
Lifelessly they glide with me
Advancing, expanding, dominating my darkness..our darkness,
Or the lack of light there is.
Heartlessly they invade the space where dreams are free
Freely developing into nightmares
Haunting all who sleep in peace, in dimness,
Or the lack of light there is.
Peacefully, wistfully do they move
Causing destruction
Obstructing the only way for the dreams to escape
For dreams are to be clear
Clearly unable to survive in murkiness,
Or the lack of light there is.
There is but false hope left for every mind trying to hold on to the promise
Only to acknowledge that failure has taken control
Further and further the lost souls, the lost dreams within me slip away...
Away... out of reach
Timelessly floating through time
Intertwined in darkness,
Or the lack of light there is
Copyright ©
ginabelle
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2009-02-26 00:22:25]
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Re: The Lost Souls
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by venkat on
Thursday, 26th February 2009 @ 12:52:38 AM AEST
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| There is some great spark in the second stanza of the poem..you identified the eternal pulsation in the space.. which is like heart beat of the universe..but thinking of it as mere darkness, perhaps I don't agree since it is the eternal conciousness of space, the substratum of the creation. I feel the lost souls can reach only the base level of the space where great winds form the chaos ..How ever I am happy to read a very thoughtful poem..sincerely I feel it is well presented. Blessings. venkat |
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Re: The Lost Souls
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 26th February 2009 @ 01:28:02 AM AEST
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I really haven't got any critique or advice. I give it a five and applaud. I really really like it and found it to be thought provoking, dark, eerie, intriguing and well, I love it.
Very enjoyable.
Thank you,
Tim |
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