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last photo of our race
Contributed by
Voice of the Silent
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Wednesday, 25th February 2009 @ 10:44:02 PM in AEST
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One of my first shots at free verse it has some rhyme but still. hope you like it
Our final storm comes so fast
This might be human kinds last
Rain comes down so hard
It like god takes a picture before we die
Thunder like the snap of the shot
Lightning the flash that makes skin rot
Our final storm comes in so fast
It kills all of human kind
And god is sitting in his high room
Practicing his photography
For the perfect shot of man kind
While we stare death in the face
God is getting a special picture of the genocide of our race
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Voice of the Silent
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2009-02-25 22:44:02]
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Re: last photo of our race
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by venkat on
Wednesday, 25th February 2009 @ 11:20:42 PM AEST
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What a wonderful comparison..God the photographer..and lightening the flash.
Very good .. Venkat |
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Re: last photo of our race
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by dark_poet on
Thursday, 26th February 2009 @ 12:01:55 AM AEST
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i can agree with you on this. i love the metaphors on this with lighning dieing and photography. excellent write my friend
kelly brent i hope to see more of your work, take cares
dark poet, |
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Re: last photo of our race
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by 3660Days on
Wednesday, 15th April 2009 @ 12:13:41 AM AEST
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| I have to say, the comparison of lightning with photography....brilliant! Those are the kinds of images and concepts that have the potential to take a poem that extra step. Bravo to you. |
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