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Rock Bottom.
Contributed by
Bleedthelove
on
Wednesday, 25th February 2009 @ 08:16:01 PM in AEST
Topic:
EmotionalPoetry
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Shattered and poisoned
At rock bottom I rest
Needle in my arm
Knife in my chest
Straight through my broken heart
Ripped apart
I remember myself
Like a faded picture
A forgotten memory
This is my destiny
To perish alone
I have grown to be a soul unknown
Carrying more sadness
Than a child without a home
Empty memories and bloody knees
Blue eyes like the angry seas
Convicted and addicted
Scarred and afflicted
This is my cross to bare
These are the scars I wear
Disappearing inside my own despair
Shamed to be the person I have become
Sold my soul to the sadness
Now I'm reaping the outcome
Literally crawling on pins and needles
It's so evil how beautiful it makes me feel
Escaping the pain of these wounds that will not heal
Numbing myself to a state beyond reality
Like a slow dance with my own fatality
Crazy but sane, alive but dead
It's just the pain bleeding through the thoughts in my head
And the only thing I really know is that I miss you
As I sit gazing at your reflection upon this knife in my chest
Straight through my broken heart
Here at rock bottom......where I rest.
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Bleedthelove
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2009-02-25 20:16:01]
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Re: Rock Bottom.
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by Mars on
Wednesday, 25th February 2009 @ 10:13:32 PM AEST
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| Quite disturbing images you have there =P. 3rd line from the bottom... how is upon used here... ah'... I see. His/Her gaze is upon the knife in your chest. I can relate to this comparison of a broken heart to the cross that is carried in the poem, like such a burden that you hold diligently, almost religiously... but then so is the pain of a broken heart. We may forgive, but we may never forget. Interesting read. |
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Re: Rock Bottom.
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by dark_poet on
Wednesday, 25th February 2009 @ 11:21:37 PM AEST
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i wrote about rock bottom too haha we are alike. well , i liked this piece alot. it had that dark flow to it. i liked how you used this metaphor:
Empty memories and bloody knees
Blue eyes like the angry seas
i feel you on this one.it gave me the chills after reading this piece. enjoyed it 8/10 |
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Re: Rock Bottom.
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by Voice of the Silent on
Thursday, 26th February 2009 @ 10:26:21 PM AEST
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Great imagery very vivid great write
hope to read more soon
-kelly |
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