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Moonlight Cadence
Contributed by
kye
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Friday, 20th February 2009 @ 08:51:10 PM in AEST
Topic:
NaturePoetry
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Winter’s snow has fallen
silencing the air
crystalizing spearmint
to scent within my hair
With tears adjacent sniffles
cold without a care
Pairing tiny rivers
that lead to hidden lairs
Sun-time thoughts lie sleeping
veiled till mist of spring
Thus will lift the curtain
as birds begin to sing
A thought within a moonbeam
filtering the night
The cadence of the season
blanketed in white
Copyright ©
kye
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2009-02-20 20:51:10]
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Re: Moonlight Cadence
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by Jenni_K on
Friday, 20th February 2009 @ 09:03:19 PM AEST
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Not one to give critique but I would say that I have enjoyed this imensely.... The imagery left me with a feeling of peace and tranquillity.. Good to see you posting again.
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Re: Moonlight Cadence
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by venkat on
Friday, 20th February 2009 @ 09:47:38 PM AEST
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It has been so long..I am happy to see you posting again..the imagery is very beautiful..
It really shines the beauty of a single moonbeam :-)venkat
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Re: Moonlight Cadence
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 21st February 2009 @ 03:34:49 AM AEST
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Hmmmm.. critique huh? Something I rarely do. Keep up the god work? How is that?
This was so...so.... .... Jenni already said, it. It was so peaceful and the imagery so real.
Anyway, thank you for a very enjoyable read.
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Re: Moonlight Cadence
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 21st February 2009 @ 04:30:02 AM AEST
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a beautiful flowing work with some great imagery. good work!
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Re: Moonlight Cadence
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by Loende on
Saturday, 21st February 2009 @ 08:21:52 PM AEST
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Well, you haven't lost the touch. This is a lilting piece that just flows off the tongue. Great come back. Thanks for sharing it with us.
Be well,
~Loende |
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Re: Moonlight Cadence
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by ShaonKra on
Sunday, 22nd February 2009 @ 03:03:14 PM AEST
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Great, very good alliteration, rhythm and structure. Imagery is also very effective especially 'crystalizing spearmint to scent within my hair', like it
-ShaonKra- |
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Re: Moonlight Cadence
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by lnnie on
Sunday, 22nd February 2009 @ 03:57:46 PM AEST
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hI kYE
Read the two poems I have seen and I am astounded
by the imagery and imagination within them.
Unusual use of word order, commenting on the scene
yet also moving above the scene.
Good stuff!
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Re: Moonlight Cadence
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by emystar on
Friday, 13th March 2009 @ 10:06:39 PM AEST
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Wow kie,
this is beautiful. It melts the sting of Winter.
Welcome home, dear friend.
huggs, smiles, blessings,
emy |
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Re: Moonlight Cadence
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by elle on
Sunday, 29th March 2009 @ 02:41:58 PM AEST
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| these are lovely images that lend a feeling of serenity & peace to the winter season. lovely. elle |
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Re: Moonlight Cadence
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by 2Deep4U on
Friday, 17th April 2009 @ 08:02:44 PM AEST
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| It seems senseless to critique someone on a higher lvl than me. I've noticed that the words ppl use to convay your vision speaks alot about you. I see many things when I read your poem. |
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