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Teardrops in the Sand
Contributed by
Petals_and_Tears
on
Wednesday, 18th February 2009 @ 03:49:19 PM in AEST
Topic:
secrets
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Teardrops in the sand;
tiny craters
engraved by my eyes,
but erased by the tide.
Salty tears
meet the
salty waves.
Harken and display
to my world and yours.
Exploding on the rocks,
sprays of laughter
at my pain
even my own tears scorn me.
Yet its pain I don’t control.
So please
please,
wash away the pain.
Wash away the tears,
leave no trace
so no-one ever sees
my teardrops in the sand.
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Petals_and_Tears
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2009-02-18 15:49:19]
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Re: Teardrops in the Sand
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by lostinmyself on
Wednesday, 18th February 2009 @ 08:15:22 PM AEST
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Firstly, welcome to YPDC :D It's very good to have you here.
This is an excellent first post. It leaves just enough to the imagination, and yet provides enough that you really feel like you can relate to the writer. It's really very good.
I'll definitely be keeping an eye out for your writing in the future.
Phil xxx |
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Re: Teardrops in the Sand
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by Recyclebin on
Thursday, 19th February 2009 @ 11:58:18 PM AEST
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Wow I concur with Phil- I can't believe there is not more comments on this piece. And welcome to YPDC. I will also keep my eyes peeled out for the petals of tears.
Great write!
~Bin~ |
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Re: Teardrops in the Sand
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 21st February 2009 @ 05:57:06 PM AEST
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Okay, I'm with Phil & Bin. Pretty much they said! This is so beautiful.
Take care,
Tim |
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