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The Snow can't hide this.
Contributed by
ATG
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Tuesday, 3rd February 2009 @ 02:29:11 PM in AEST
Topic:
ambiguous
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It rains, its spills in torrents, a myriad of floods,
The slick of the streets cascading into the hungry mouths of the drains.
People run, a stampede
The rain triumphs as the streets are emptied
It washes away all those images,
But I say it will snow tomorrow
It snows, its path gentle, gliding softly down.
Its whiteness softening every hard surface
People play, a temptation
The streets are filled for this occasion
It bleaches all those memories
But I say it will melt by morning.
It's a beautiful day, the sun grows with golden glow,
in the rivers the autumn leaves stows,
People smile as one entity.
As Though anything is possible within this serenity.
It distracts my thoughts.
But I say it will rain tomorrow.
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ATG
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Re: The Snow can't hide this.
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by Incognito_Bombastus on
Tuesday, 3rd February 2009 @ 04:05:06 PM AEST
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| A beautiful write of imagery and a great flow of form. Write more. Thank you I.B. |
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Re: The Snow can't hide this.
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by elle on
Tuesday, 3rd February 2009 @ 09:13:18 PM AEST
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a very nice proceeding. wonderful images of the relationship of humanity
to the weather. & this left me feeling so peaceful. thanks. peace. elle |
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Re: The Snow can't hide this.
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by zenith66 on
Wednesday, 4th February 2009 @ 04:12:48 AM AEST
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an absolute storm of a write, you really did a stunning job here of sucking me into the flowing images of the wearther, the hungry mounths of the drain, i could feel the emotion and it was raw, brilliant write here my freind, you have a claer talent for imagery and that cant be taught,
i love the humanity to it aswell though, how you say it will rain and it does, its so oddly peacfull and a great escape to dive into, great writing,
some of you lines in there were too beautiful!!
keep it up! |
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