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Demons of my heart
Contributed by
desireemiote
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Sunday, 1st February 2009 @ 04:21:26 PM in AEST
Topic:
anguished
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Demons of my heart out to ruin my mind
In this darkness impossible to find
A light to turn on to give off hope
Can't reach the bright young ones I call my own
My misery touches them and hurts them I know
But I can't reach their hopeful glow
I love them very much
But I don't feel they understand my touch
They see my anguish
It upsets them
But I can't fake being happy
Misery shows past my hem
I'm miserable and making everyone else feel
Like there's no hope to make me happy for real
I want to fix it, I'm trying to please
But that's just the problem, I need help, I'm on my knees
I can't make myself ask, as it seems to make trouble
But I have to have help and from only him on the double
The demons are closing in to harden my heart
When will he understand of this he needs to be a part?!
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Re: Demons of my heart
(User Rating: 1 )
by ek_da_poet on
Monday, 2nd February 2009 @ 01:44:31 PM AEST
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this was very good but it got off pattern
They see my anguish
It upsets them
But I can't fake being happy
every line rhymed before and after that keeping the meaning
great write and control those demons!!!!!
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Re: Demons of my heart
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by navydocny on
Thursday, 5th February 2009 @ 08:43:59 PM AEST
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Going through quite a bit myself...
this site has helped me to better articulate my feelings and hopes. The poetry that I write is cathartic and I send copies of each one to my wife. She doesn't comment on them or tell me to stop, so I just keep writing.
You should share this with your husband, its what you feel and most likely better structured than if you just say what's on your mind, Works that way for me at least. Can't get anywhere without communication, whether its one or two sided.
Just my thoughts...
Great job with this...
Keep up the posts...
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