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The Wait
Contributed by
net
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Tuesday, 27th January 2009 @ 05:25:57 PM in AEST
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He listens now
As he does the things he always does
Praying to overcome
This endless waiting
He listens to the sounds outside
Would they ever come closer?
Let the handle turn
For once
Let the phone buzz
He drinks now
Alone, singing
As he moves around
Posing for the phantom eyes
The lights come down flashing
Hands all around clapping
The speakers are cheap but
They keep the show going
So he sleeps
He keeps the door open
For him loneliness is a blessing
But he weeps even so
Whatever problems he has
He keeps them for showing
All the things he does now
He keeps them for selling
In his heart he knows
He doesn’t want to be found
But nevertheless he wishes
And yet again he knows
The best wishes are
The ones that won’t come true
For they feed him
They feed the music he likes
The people he hangs around
There is a plan
He’s on it for a while now
The last show for this phantom crowd
With all the pain he breeds
All the tears he collects in jars
He’s going to shine
Shine for a last time.
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net
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Re: The Wait
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by fanniesson on
Wednesday, 28th January 2009 @ 11:43:27 AM AEST
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I like this poem
but it needs to be tighten up
lots of words here not needed
of course this is my opinion
and it’s your poem
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Re: The Wait
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 28th January 2009 @ 11:59:40 AM AEST
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a very interesting write. the imagery was very good and held my attention. i particularly liked these lines:
The best wishes are
The ones that won’t come true
it got me thinking, and i like it when poems do that.
-phil
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Re: The Wait
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by InfinitePoet on
Wednesday, 28th January 2009 @ 05:55:54 PM AEST
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Bravo~!!! Wow! This was an excellent write! I love the way you describe the crowd and their eyes as phantoms! This one is unique to me
PepperMint~!~ |
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Re: The Wait
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 28th January 2009 @ 11:46:47 PM AEST
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No No no need to tighten it.... i like it very much.... good written
cheers |
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