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A Pillow To Cover My Face
Contributed by
puppy_dog_eyes
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Saturday, 24th January 2009 @ 05:37:03 PM in AEST
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Grey sky clings to the day
Slow moving ashen forms crawl over themselves
Linked as a barrier
Kindred keepers of deepening gloom
Shafts of light extinguished
Smothered by a blanket of infinite smog
Oppresive and brooding
Sunshine banished, the monarch overthrown
Flower stems bowed earthward
Puppets dancing at the whim of the wind
Tall trees now are shivering
Discarded leaves scarcely kissing the ground
Birds blown like paper
Wingbeats mismatched to the incoming swell
Wrapped figures walking
Breath of cold smoke funnels to sky
Fire roaring steadily
Soothes as a lullabye sung to a child
Whisps flick like kitten tails
Light giving warmth like a blanket alive
Why would I venture forth ?
Now as the evening air draws in the mist
Foreboding and choking
It seems like a pillow to cover my face
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Re: A Pillow To Cover My Face
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by emystar on
Saturday, 24th January 2009 @ 06:06:04 PM AEST
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Awesome scenary in this write,
Good work dear friend.
huggs, smiles, blessings, stay warm,
emy |
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Re: A Pillow To Cover My Face
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by Loende on
Saturday, 24th January 2009 @ 09:18:49 PM AEST
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Goodness...I got kind of lost in this. It has such mesmerizing imagery and beauty. In your 4th stanza, you talk of birds on the wind...I've often wondered on those days if it's a joy or a frustration. At any rate, I really enjoyed this piece. Thank you for sharing it with us.
Be well,
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Re: A Pillow To Cover My Face
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 25th January 2009 @ 08:44:15 AM AEST
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this is incredible writing. your metaphors are absolutely spellbinding. i couldn't even pick out one special bit because it was all wonderful. brilliant work.
-phil |
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Re: A Pillow To Cover My Face
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by Recyclebin on
Sunday, 25th January 2009 @ 11:47:54 AM AEST
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This my friend is excellent writing, some people have the ability to structure a poem but few have the talent to get the meaning across.
Look forward to more of your work.
~Bin~
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Re: A Pillow To Cover My Face
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by shelby on
Sunday, 25th January 2009 @ 09:12:14 PM AEST
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Bravo! This is incredible poetry here my friend.
Birds blown like paper one of many parts I love.
There is so much depth to this write.
Stay warm and keep penning...... this is soul food for me.
Hugs
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Re: A Pillow To Cover My Face
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 19th February 2009 @ 06:09:16 PM AEST
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| I really loved the imagery in this poem.great job! |
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Re: A Pillow To Cover My Face
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by petulinka on
Saturday, 6th August 2011 @ 04:30:00 AM AEST
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| Really great work!!..i love your use of words!! |
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Re: A Pillow To Cover My Face
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by allforyou on
Monday, 19th November 2018 @ 12:34:38 AM AEST
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| I absolutely love this! This is fantastic! (applauds) |
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