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My Village, winter and hope
Contributed by
khan
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Thursday, 22nd January 2009 @ 01:38:53 PM in AEST
Topic:
Lifepoems
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First snow atop the hill,
sends a chill to the spine
it melts down all hopes
for the morning sunshine
men, women, pets and cattle,
bit dismayed, amidst lull and calm
iced winds, blades cutting through,
yet into a storm it has not brewed
hordes of men hurry and store
piles of extra wood and grass
time for them to hibernate,
talking and singing to hour-glass
each one must tell a story,
sitting by fire, under lock n bolt
happy women, busy with stove
lots of tea, meat and broiled poult
Father and sons, one by one
climb the roof of their muddy abode
with shovels, spades and iron blades
they brush aside the unwanted load
Every winter passes thus
with such fervour and desire,
for a sunny and brighter morning
so as to smother the burning fire
Copyright ©
khan
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2009-01-22 13:38:53]
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Re: My Village, winter and hope
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by shelby on
Thursday, 22nd January 2009 @ 03:18:56 PM AEST
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This is a delight to read. Thanks for sharing a glimpse into a different time.
Michelle |
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Re: My Village, winter and hope
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by zenith66 on
Thursday, 22nd January 2009 @ 09:25:48 PM AEST
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wow i really liked this piece, it bled passion and color, also i feel you painted the screen so well, the lack of electricity, ahh simpler times eh, lol, i love my techno babble as well tho lol,
your talented and very good with imagery, each verse concocted a scene with grace and ease,
i don't want to nitpick lol, but i feel with a bit more attention to meter and syllable your poetry would stand tall above many here,
also i must say that last verse was amazing, stunning,!!
great work keep it up!! |
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Re: My Village, winter and hope
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by dilrubay on
Saturday, 24th January 2009 @ 12:55:38 AM AEST
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Paints a perfect picture of
a typical day at the advent of winter
in your village..I can visualize it completely..
It conveys the mood so aptly and so beautifully..
Please keep writing..
Wishing you the best
In peace..
Dilrubay
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