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Random Love
Contributed by
Ari
on
Tuesday, 13th January 2009 @ 01:35:14 PM in AEST
Topic:
LovePoetry
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I need you so much
That I think about leaving
I think about you so much
That I know I can't be with you anymore
Because I know that you don't love me as much as I do
I know that you won't ever
So I need to stop loving you...
Copyright ©
Ari
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2009-01-13 13:35:14] (Date/Time posted on
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Re: Random Love
(User Rating: 1 ) by spanky on
Tuesday, 13th January 2009 @ 07:21:12 PM AEST (User
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Makes no sense...and it's also stupid! Re-write it for heaven's sake, Ari baby!
I am the world's greatest living pop poet. Try to write more like this:
I jumped up high and landed
In the middle of a star,
And said, "This must be Heaven...
Look how beautiful you are!"
I jumped again and landed
In the velvet black of space.
And there I met a spirit
Who was in "the state of grace."
"No easy task," the spirit said,
"A union...one, with God."
And me a sinner born and bred-
It struck me rather odd. |
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