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On News of a Double Hernia ..
Contributed by
fanniesson
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Monday, 12th January 2009 @ 07:38:04 AM in AEST
Topic:
sarcasticpoetry
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I met Christ at breakfast this morning,
in that greasy spoon across from the Health Center.
Introduced himself to me.
Even threw a quick blessing my way.
After I passed him the ketchup he asked for.
Yeah, thought it funny at first.
Him looking as he did.
Short blond hair no beard, handlebar mustache,
a distinct South Brooklyn draw,
but I wasn't about to anger him.
Asking for picture I.D.
So I asked him to, thank his old man
next time he ran into him for me.
Tell Him the guy you just gave the double hernia to,
sends his regards.
He'll know who you mean .
He's been screwing with me for years now
over something I did.
Though for the love of me.
I can't remember what.
Copyright ©
fanniesson
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2009-01-12 07:38:04]
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Re: On News of a Double Hernia ..
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by spanky on
Monday, 12th January 2009 @ 07:03:21 PM AEST
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You don't explain in your poem how, why, when or where Jesus gave you the double hernia. The fact that you left that out makes the poem less sensible.
Your poem is quite interesting and provocative otherwise. |
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Re: On News of a Double Hernia ..
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by Spike on
Tuesday, 13th January 2009 @ 06:10:04 AM AEST
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Ha! a subtle snipe, loved the modern setting. Bet the Good Son rode a hog to the cafe - those things are made in heaven, you know.
The old bugger is messing with my pipes, too. Give him my one finger salute.
Spike
p.s spanky seems confused... |
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