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The city.
Contributed by
liamleash
on
Saturday, 10th January 2009 @ 03:24:14 PM in AEST
Topic:
abstract
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Your keeping your cards close.
In the club as the tones of the night fall on deaf ears.
The DJ plays one more song and gives up.
The smoke intoxicates the room leaving a smell of agenda.
As he pulls out his phone and makes one last call.
She puts her drink to the table and looks into the glass.
Seeing herself she realises this is all she is.
I can see but I keep holding on and on and on.
As they place hands on the desk, she moves over.
And puts her number across his gin.
He looks up with the devilish grin.
"I’m here for one night and I’m not looking for you".
She moves away feeling cheated out of her night.
The concrete path and the lights create a prologue for what’s to come.
Eyes flutter but the mouths stay on course.
As he leaves and steers himself down the path.
Counting each step he takes making it look like simple math.
But as easy as it looks to keep balance, he's out of control.
He's on the look for her but she's not there tonight.
Stood him up as he falls down.
Into the gutter, he's more concerned he's spilt his drink on the floor.
As it falls away he prays for forgiveness.
His life isn’t all that its cracked up to be.
As the flaws in the floor save him for one more night.
He falls asleep in the cold arms of the world.
Waking up his bed he's thankful she found him one more time.
But no excuses as he reads a note that’s left.
And with it she's gone too.
"Your so in love with the drink how can I be in love with you".
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liamleash
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2009-01-10 15:24:14]
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Re: The city.
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by Mars on
Saturday, 10th January 2009 @ 10:07:09 PM AEST
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| That hurts, but even more so to the woman. Just imagine how she feels, being given second place to a simple adicition. Very nice. |
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Re: The city.
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by stress707 on
Monday, 12th January 2009 @ 01:57:25 AM AEST
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| Great overall message- the theme was great but I got lost in the bulk of the poem. Anyhow, far better than I can do- good on you. |
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