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unfinished. . .
Contributed by
elle
on
Tuesday, 23rd December 2008 @ 09:47:16 AM in AEST
Topic:
SadPoetry
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the compositon lay unfinished.
remnants of thought,
left loosely bound.
decay swollen in times' creases,
dust air filtering.
no sound.
the quiet, so stifling.
befriending, not a soul,
nor did one tarry.
no one to behold.
each entry earmarked
by design, with date & feeling.
stark refine.
brittle. . .
fragile. . .
infantile.
words that clamoured
of denial.
the war had ended.
true, only a handful knew.
sad. . . raging terror.
God had sparred so few.
Copyright ©
elle
... [
2008-12-23 09:47:16]
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Re: unfinished. . .
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 23rd December 2008 @ 01:12:26 PM AEST
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great writing. i particularly enjoyed this bit:
brittle. . .
fragile. . .
infantile.
words that clamoured
of denial.
superb stuff. great poem.
-phil |
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Re: unfinished. . .
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by SilverRain on
Tuesday, 23rd December 2008 @ 04:23:29 PM AEST
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| Your word choices are all good, making for a well-flowing poem. Well done. |
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Re: unfinished. . .
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 2nd February 2009 @ 01:27:23 AM AEST
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| Imaginative, lonely, melancholy, spiritual yearning from within a pained soul left out to dry. This just made me want to reach out and hug you...or the person it was about. Excellent creativity. |
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