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Life's A Scam
Contributed by
Mars
on
Wednesday, 17th December 2008 @ 06:01:46 PM in AEST
Topic:
anguished
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I understand
That they don't care
I've come to terms
Life's not fair
That no one knows
Who I am
That no one cares
Life's a scam
So alone
Left in the cold
All my dreams
And hopes are sold
There's nothing left
Here for me
All is dark
As far I see
Tonight I cry
For what could have been
If I'm to die
It'd still be a sin
There was a chance
I could have won
They burned it all
I was done
I had a chance
Once before
That I could love
Thrown to the floor
Traitors they are
Every last one
For all they care
They love no one
Copyright ©
Mars
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2008-12-17 18:01:46]
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Re: Life's A Scam
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 18th December 2008 @ 05:24:08 AM AEST
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the flow is superb. a very passionate write once more. great work.
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Re: Life's A Scam
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by Balmain_Tiger on
Thursday, 18th December 2008 @ 05:39:36 AM AEST
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| Chances come and go, But to judge and pit ours against theirs leads to despair. and from a poem I read on this site...... when the fire settles from the ashes the Phoenix will rise. |
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Re: Life's A Scam
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by gmcse8 on
Saturday, 20th December 2008 @ 07:06:03 AM AEST
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| Dynamite in small packages is the phrase that comes to mind when I read the poem. I have a special liking for poems that say a lot with a few words, that have short concise phrasing, and short lines. Regardless of topic, these sort of poems are what I like. It almost reads like a "stream of consiousness" writing. I enjoyed it. |
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Re: Life's A Scam
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 10th January 2009 @ 06:48:01 PM AEST
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I like the way you formatted this one. Short lines but very powerful with emotion. People suck but not all of us. I think it definitely helps to write about it. Hope it gets better.
Tim |
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