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The fervor of my own desire.
Contributed by
iodinelove
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Thursday, 11th December 2008 @ 11:49:41 PM in AEST
Topic:
LovePoetry
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My love,
My hope is lost in you, the simplest of your smiles dwarf the immensity of my love for you, and as always, I struggle to begin, considering the struggle of a clear night sky to unveil new stars in the presence of the sun.
My voice falls mute before you, as the intricacy of a small rose dwindles in the presence of its own beauty, so does my voice falter in the fervor of its own desire. I dream that you have answered my pleas, unheard in the trembling of my heart, unheeded in the eruption of my tears.
How I yearn to stand before you, how my soul rises to my throat in trepidation and delight in consideration of you; my heart fails in jubilation for you, singing, you are the sun across the sea of death and sadness, the leopard in the snows of love.
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2008-12-11 23:49:41]
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Re: The fervor of my own desire.
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 12th December 2008 @ 08:20:11 AM AEST
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very impressive, very passionate, some superb imagery in this one. i like your poetic style, very good indeed.
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Re: The fervor of my own desire.
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by Mars on
Friday, 12th December 2008 @ 04:21:46 PM AEST
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| Its pretty good, nice images and very discriptive. Personally, I get a feeling that it's a bit too discriptive. Well, it's still a great piece. Remember that this is my opinion, and your entitled to belive what you want =). |
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