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I wish it would rain
Contributed by
xmorbid6childrnx
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Thursday, 11th December 2008 @ 11:28:30 AM in AEST
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hbadday
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I felt the rain fall,
and I fell with it.
I never knew how weak I was
until I felt my knees bend to the weight.
Washing away everything that was loose
and shiftable.
I thought i was unshiftable, unmoveable.
I felt so heavy inside, and i could feel myself falling.
I just couldn't get up.
So many times i just sat there naked in the shower and let the water fall on me.
Tonight i looked over and i saw the light reflect off of the water droplets or possibly my tears.
I realized that, I am what i don't want to be.
Weak
I tried so hard, but the harder I tried the more I failed.
You really can't see it but I can.
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2008-12-11 11:28:30]
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Re: I wish it would rain
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by Mars on
Thursday, 11th December 2008 @ 03:24:44 PM AEST
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| I don't know what to say... I do like this poem, but I like very many poems too =P. It embodies how I feel sometimes when being struck down (not physically), or when labeled as someone who I'm not. To you, if you wrote this about yourself, your not weak. Take poetry for example. Your a good poet and understands how to weave the fabric of emotion. We are all here in this world together. Even if we each have our own =). |
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Re: I wish it would rain
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 11th December 2008 @ 04:18:40 PM AEST
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yes, we all get like that sometimes, including me. an emotional, tragic, but good write.
-phil |
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Re: I wish it would rain
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by MelanieLovesScott08 on
Friday, 9th January 2009 @ 03:37:58 PM AEST
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| I can definitely feel the pain and greif you put into this poem, and when someone says that or feels that, you know you've accomplished in your writings. A lot of people can relate to this poem. I honestly Love it! But dont give up becuase when things are as low as they can go theres only one other way they can go, up! Hang in there! |
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Re: I wish it would rain
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by TeRrahiel on
Friday, 17th April 2009 @ 03:11:57 AM AEST
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| I like it because, to some extent, it describes my situation. Keep writing like this:) |
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