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RUSTY KNIGHT FACING THE WRONG WAY.
Contributed by
gmcse8
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Tuesday, 9th December 2008 @ 05:31:21 PM in AEST
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Metal creaks, joints protest, rust flakes fall to the floor,
its seems, that this rusty old armor is heavier each day.
Rusty chain mail donned first, links no longer supple,
and like the bones holding it up, movement, age does betray.
Armor dented, scarred, bones stiffened by time; prepared,
for the fray, he dons the helmut, paldroons, gautlet, & greave.
Forward into battle for the Dark Princess, will he never learn;
all who just stand and watch, think he is to old, to be still so naive.
Each new day greeted, arrayed in rusty armor ready to do battle,
protecting her always, willing to stand in harm's way,
ready to give his full measure of devotion to protect her dreams
He asks himself not for the first time, is it worth entering the affray.
Day passes, another fight, rusty armor against an onslaught,
rusty pieces aside, counting dents garnered standing at her door.
As he counts dents, this is odd he thinks, how is this possible,
new dents in the rust are all in the back, with whom is he at war?
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Re: RUSTY KNIGHT FACING THE WRONG WAY.
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by Voice of the Silent on
Tuesday, 9th December 2008 @ 05:47:18 PM AEST
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Great write
For something that just came to you it turned out really good
I can't think about what I write it just has to come to me because if i think about it I forget
but people do things different ways
again great write
keep writing
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Re: RUSTY KNIGHT FACING THE WRONG WAY.
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by Mars on
Tuesday, 9th December 2008 @ 09:53:37 PM AEST
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I think it's interesting. (Not trying to be offensive if it's taken that way.) I like your image of the so called, 'knight in shining armor'. I write in a way similar to how you wrote this one; I can't seem to just make myself write a good poem. Usually I will just 'get' an idea doing something random, and start writing and... that's about it =P.
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Re: RUSTY KNIGHT FACING THE WRONG WAY.
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by emystar on
Wednesday, 10th December 2008 @ 05:02:47 AM AEST
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Wow, this writing is incredible.
I write mostly lyrics. The title comes first, then course, then the rest.
Awesome work.
Huggs, smiles, blessings,
I'm no Knight but considering my age, I can totally relate to this work of art. |
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Re: RUSTY KNIGHT FACING THE WRONG WAY.
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 10th December 2008 @ 07:47:13 AM AEST
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for one that's just come to you this was an excellent piece. the level of description was excellent and you included some very good metaphors in there. excellent work.
-phil |
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