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The Damp
Contributed by
Mars
on
Monday, 8th December 2008 @ 09:41:15 PM in AEST
Topic:
oops
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In all disorder a hidden order,
history in our blood and mortar,
will show you today.
The way...
From the ashes, a new spirit rides,
shall you pass, the torch resides,
oh, what you would give,
To live...
You only win if it's given a spin,
A chance you left down at the inn,
A dream dies,
To lies...
For what we yearn, we've lost a turn,
What could have been, shall burn,
A victim of desire,
In fire...
On a cool moon-lit night he rides,
An evil spirit who misguides,
For this he came,
To claim...
To live in this world of ours,
Under the eyes, of the towers.
there can be no blame.
To name...
We are all responsible,
A tale ends, this chronicle,
for what could have been.
The end...
Copyright ©
Mars
... [
2008-12-08 21:41:15]
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Re: The Damp
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 9th December 2008 @ 05:41:28 PM AEST
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you've used an interesting structure, so well done for trying something different. i think it worked well, good effort.
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Re: The Damp
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 24th January 2009 @ 11:24:42 PM AEST
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Wow, I really like this. While to me it seems a tad ambiguous it on the other hand also seems filled with profoundness.
So, I made an observation of sorts. would the towers be a reference to the Twin Towers from 9-11?
Anyway, thanks for an enjoyable read.
Tim |
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