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Damaged
Contributed by
iNC
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Monday, 8th December 2008 @ 05:28:02 AM in AEST
Topic:
EmotionalPoetry
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I cannot stand to look at your pictures, but all I want is to hold you in my arms
You brought my soul great happiness, but my mind great harm
I wish I never met you, yet I wish I met you sooner
You made me feel like a winner, and at the same time a loser
I wish I could erase you from my mind
But I have no choice
My love is held prisoner and she has no voice
Day by day I die inside
For my love is not with me; she prefers to hide
You were my best friend and my worst enemy
I guess my enemy won, cause you finally got rid of me
Night after night my heart is filled with worries
Because all I have left are fading memories
My desire to live is almost depleted
Without you I shall never be completed
My anger is gone... I am defeated.
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iNC
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Re: Damaged
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by snoopington on
Monday, 8th December 2008 @ 05:49:48 AM AEST
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great write very emotional i know how you feel been trough it myself in time youll feel complete again keep writin it helps......
all the best........
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Re: Damaged
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by Balmain_Tiger on
Monday, 8th December 2008 @ 08:07:37 AM AEST
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| Love hurts and life goes on! very well expressed feelings |
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Re: Damaged
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by Loende on
Monday, 8th December 2008 @ 05:34:50 PM AEST
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I've said it to others and I'll say it again to you. Love is the most difficult easy emotion. You've captured the pain of it's loss here though. Great write. Thank you for your post.
Be well,
Loende |
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Re: Damaged
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by Mars on
Monday, 8th December 2008 @ 10:03:13 PM AEST
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| Love, it can keep you like a slave, and it can be the best thing that ever happened to you. It is a very complicated thing, and powerful at that, some see hopelessness in it all, but others find happiness. This poem says a lot about the power that love holds and what it can do to us, thanks for sharing. |
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Re: Damaged
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by iNC on
Tuesday, 9th December 2008 @ 01:23:15 AM AEST
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| Thank you for your replies. I should write more often. I always wanted to write but never get around to doing it. Perhaps it's time I let my thoughts out. |
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Re: Damaged
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 9th December 2008 @ 05:24:05 PM AEST
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i like how you have used contrasting emotions in this poem, i think it works perfectly. clearly a poem filled with much regret, the ending sums this up. in fact the ending is stunning, the rhyming triplet works very well indeed. overall, a very good poem.
-phil |
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