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Altar
Contributed by
navydocny
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Thursday, 4th December 2008 @ 07:04:57 PM in AEST
Topic:
LostLove
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What do you offer upon love’s grand alter?
Do you give freely, your one and true Psalter?
So much to give and so much to be taken
So much for the love that we both have forsaken
I brought us to this, though not my intention
Draped our wonderful life in dire contravention
Repentant I’ll kneel, for years if it need be
To know for just a moment, that you will forgive me
And maybe someday, you’ll reach for my hand
To pull me back from this desolate land
Empty of us, our own insularity
One more chance to feel our love’s charity
Copyright ©
navydocny
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2008-12-04 19:04:57]
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Re: Altar
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by eternalsunshine on
Friday, 5th December 2008 @ 09:41:45 AM AEST
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This is a wonderful poem, enjoyed much
much love to you |
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Re: Altar
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 5th December 2008 @ 10:43:41 AM AEST
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written with genuine emotion, there is some wonderful language in here, epitomised by this line:
Draped our wonderful life in dire contravention
that is simply goldust. very well done.
-phil |
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Re: Altar
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by Loende on
Saturday, 6th December 2008 @ 12:33:26 AM AEST
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Steve...
My heart aches for you. You are so capable of taking a reader right into your soul. I have no doubt that you would spend an eternity on your knees, if that's the cost. I hope you get another chance. Great job.
Be well,
~Loende |
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Re: Altar
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by Lilymaemax on
Saturday, 6th December 2008 @ 06:11:30 AM AEST
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| As usual you never disappoint.Had to get out the dictionary again "Psalter" new word for me!Enjoyable poetry and being educated.Lilymae |
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