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alone
Contributed by
snoopington
on
Wednesday, 3rd December 2008 @ 10:19:13 AM in AEST
Topic:
Lifepoems
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i look through the window to the world outside,
from which i suddenly hide,
light to dark happens all so fast,
as if never meant to last.
so many years of life iv lived,
not lived but exsisted,for this i sigh
as i sit and watch people pass me by,
if any of them knew the reason why,
why i sit and watch, would they cry?
or leave me here to die?
if love is life my life is done
life is war and battles won
nothings worse than a bare exsistence,
should i keep exsisting and be persistent
but for what or where to go,everyday i wake alone
no family left, all taken away,
on that cold, dark dreiry day
forever in my heart from there you'll never part
why i lived ill never know,i pray it wasn't so
alone in a world full of pain,
untill i leave wont meet again
that day might soon approach
when i board that final coach
to reunite me with life lost,
i must pay the final cost
every night i pray,
tonight please take me away,
from this big black hole is see,
REUNITE me,set me free
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snoopington
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2008-12-03 10:19:13]
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Re: alone
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by Rali_Shayne on
Wednesday, 3rd December 2008 @ 11:45:20 AM AEST
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This is very sad. I hope and pray that you do not decide to meet again with that void. Life does sometimes become black and to some completely pitch. The truth is many of us are torn between how we want to live and how we think we are forced to live. Captivity is an illusion. Just as; responsibility, and self respect. Equally an illusion is: freedom, irresponsibility, and shamelessness. Making truth a collection of what illusions the individual chooses to accept. So in truth, if you feel life is driving you into a void, rather than end such a life (or wish for an end); why not change what you see. Live in your mind, not in the world. Eventually the two places will coexist and your world will be the mind of the world you live in.
About the poem:
This is a very emotional and gripping presentation. There were a few things here and there I was not fond of. It would be anti-poetic of me however, to point them out and texpress to you how I would write your own work of art. So in the end this was a really well done and original poem. As I stated, it was emotional and gripping. Being a citizen of today's bland world who can argue with something original and emotional. Not I.
God, Love, Muse
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Re: alone
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by poetking123 on
Thursday, 4th December 2008 @ 06:32:48 PM AEST
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real emotion dang i just feel bad keep up the good work
Chris......... |
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Re: alone
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 5th December 2008 @ 10:02:50 AM AEST
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yes, life can get like this sometimes. we are all individuals and all alone in our own minds. this is the saddening reality. the poem itself is good though and has the 'x factor',
-phil |
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