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Contributed by
6whiteRoses
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Monday, 1st December 2008 @ 01:27:59 PM in AEST
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What did I do to deserve this
All of this pain that you caused
You made me feel I was useless
And all I did was wrong
But that changes now
I'm taking my life back
You've already had it
And I don't care how
Now that we're over
I'm starting all over
It's time for a change
Most nights you'll find me crying
Lying awake in the dark
So many times you abused me
With every action and remark
But that changes now
I'm taking my life back
You've already had it
And I don't care how
Now that we're over
I'm starting all over
But that changes now
I'm taking my life back
You've already had it
And I don't care how
Now that we're over
I'm starting all over
It's time for a change
oh yeah
time for a change
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2008-12-01 13:27:59]
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Re: Change
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 1st December 2008 @ 03:01:29 PM AEST
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this is a very passionate poem, and all the better for it. the repetition skillfully reiterates the point you are trying to make. i particularly like this bit:
Most nights you'll find me crying
Lying awake in the dark
So many times you abused me
With every action and remark
it's a very powerful verse. good job! |
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Re: Change
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 2nd December 2008 @ 12:32:13 AM AEST
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These reads much like song lyrics. I love the emotion in this and you reserved yourself well. Nothing over the top here, just a solid formula of emotion and a purpose to "get over it". It works, hits home, flows well.
BRAVO!
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