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walking in the rain....
Contributed by
puppy
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Monday, 1st December 2008 @ 07:18:20 AM in AEST
Topic:
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walking in the darkness surrounded by the rain,
wishing that it would wash away your pain,
feeling like you've hit a brick wall,
crouching down you feel so small,
cannot escape from the voices in your head,
each one reminding you of the past which you dread,
then tears stream down your face,
you don't want to go back to that place,
where your hearting is breaking,
and its seems everyone is taking,
just searching for one face in the crowd,
but it is nowhere to be found,
and you realise your still walking in the rain,
wishing it could wash away your pain....
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Re: walking in the rain....
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 1st December 2008 @ 03:20:31 PM AEST
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it's short, sharp and powerful. i particularly like this bit:
cannot escape from the voices in your head,
each one reminding you of the past which you dread,
i can relate to that, as i'm sure can many people. great poem. |
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Re: walking in the rain....
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by Lilymaemax on
Monday, 1st December 2008 @ 04:51:26 PM AEST
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| Oh charlie so sad for you that you are having to deal with this.The past is gone you can move on,new people new experiences.Times to precious to waste it crying.Just love the imagery of the rain and darkness well written.Lilymae |
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Re: walking in the rain....
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by snoopington on
Tuesday, 2nd December 2008 @ 08:47:16 AM AEST
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wow
cannot escape from the voices in your head
each one reminding you of the past which you dread then tears stream down your face you dont want to go back to that place.
i know excatly wat you felt like writng this very powerfull i love your flow
really enjoyed this and love to read more
all the best
m............. |
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Re: walking in the rain....
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by PlainFreshRain on
Saturday, 13th December 2008 @ 12:58:56 AM AEST
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I didn't enjoy it Charlotte
But then again, I don't enjoy
the pain of anyone, least of
all my 'lil sister:)
I know your going through a
tough patch in general. I know
you'll come through a stronger
woman.
Love you
Conal
Ps. On a lyrical note, your poem
is sound, your use of the rain etc as
a metaphor I love. I just meant the
theme was not one that I could read
intellectually , enjoy and put aside
because I know this isn't fiction.
Ya'know? :) Talk to you soon |
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