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All I'd Ever Known
Contributed by
beautiful_letdowns
on
Sunday, 30th November 2008 @ 06:46:42 PM in AEST
Topic:
EmotionalPoetry
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Sixty days of dreamless nights
Of time spent without you
Days that I had tried to fight
For a love I thought was true
Eighteen years of common sense
Thrown away without regard
Slumber in a cold suspense
Those days and nights were hard
At first I believed I was really alone
Soon it mattered no more
You were all I'd ever known
Always worth fighting for
Days of bliss in ignorance
Have somehow been depressed
As colors lose their pigments
I put myself to rest.
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2008-11-30 18:46:42]
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Re: All I'd Ever Known
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by Loende on
Sunday, 30th November 2008 @ 07:04:41 PM AEST
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It's so hard when something we thought we knew turns out to be false...
You hit the nail on the head on the first line and your last stanza perfectly captured how it feels, or at least how it felt for me. It's a brave write.
From one abandoned soul to another, I wish you peace and strength. It gets better.
Be well,
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Re: All I'd Ever Known
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by Rali_Shayne on
Monday, 1st December 2008 @ 12:39:28 AM AEST
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There is a deep sense of loss within this poem. You express loss very in a very poetic manner and the emotion leaps from each line. In particular the line before the last. It is true, when we have lost love things are not as vivid or as blissful. I didn't enjoy reading this because of the sadness within. That would I fear, be a bit morbid. I did enjoy the poetic ability you shared with us and related to us in your poem. This is excellent writing.
God, Love, Muse
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