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only from me
Contributed by
blackandblue22
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Wednesday, 26th November 2008 @ 05:19:09 PM in AEST
Topic:
secrets
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you're so far away
further than the dividing sea
I could smile
but I don't want to
I'll cry all day long
but it won't make it better
you're perfection
but only to me
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2008-11-26 17:19:09]
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Re: only from me
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by shelby on
Wednesday, 26th November 2008 @ 05:52:01 PM AEST
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this is beautiful you captured much emotion.
Michelle
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Re: only from me
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by ladyfawn on
Friday, 28th November 2008 @ 06:04:13 PM AEST
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heartfelt and honest, welcome to ypdc,
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Re: only from me
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 29th November 2008 @ 08:41:05 PM AEST
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This is well done. I agree with the others. In such a small package you have captured a lot of emotion. Your ending lines are a brilliant ending. Nobody is perfect (though in poetry when reading most of us are being lead by the writer to believe so) You are perfection but only to me is really brilliant in that sense (stating that it is only to you that he/she is perfection) but also the possible ambiguous power of the statement. For the lines directly before those final lines state that you are going to cry all day long but nothing will be better (because you realize that this person is flawed to everyone else and that you are paying the consequences for these flaws, yet you cry because you believe in his/her perfection despite what logic states.
Then there is ofcourse the distance if taken literally (as in perhaps to others he/she comes off as a figment of your imagination. Or someone who will never give you anything worthy of what you have to offer) In other words, you are perfection but you only exist to me.
I think that line is poetic brilliance for such a small poem (in terms of word count and such) but the emotional and ambiguous content are vast!
WELL DONE!
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