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Evanescense
Contributed by
Loende
on
Tuesday, 25th November 2008 @ 07:05:12 PM in AEST
Topic:
SadPoetry
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Adrift, I am a quietly brewing storm,
ever watchful, but always stationary.
An irresistible tangle of wants,
and worse,
these evanescent needs.
Twisting things that by right should have been second nature,
should have been my birthright.
But maybe this is all conjecture,
and I’m really speaking out of turn.
Maybe it’s all just a figment of my demented imagination.
Something that I can’t,
or won’t,
see clearly past the smoke and mirrors.
A little girl’s dreams turned into waking nightmares.
You talk to me like you know me, but
I’m not really who I you think I am,
or who you claim to know.
An enigma;
a varied illusion of everything I was ever meant to be.
A tamped down stampede that is busy going nowhere,
as fast as I can run away from it.
So, it should come to no great surprise now,
that I can’t contain this beast.
That it has become a temperamental child of pure physics.
Something that is just waiting to be free,
be unleashed,
on an unsuspecting public that is woefully prepared,
And I will not have anything to waste on damage control.
Thus, I am adrift, a quietly brewing storm.
Ever watchful,
and worse.
Copyright ©
Loende
... [
2008-11-25 19:05:12]
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Re: Evanescense
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by navydocny on
Wednesday, 26th November 2008 @ 05:03:00 AM AEST
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An assault on the emotions and senses...
I try to place myself when reading and this left me with hallmark feelings of sadness..
Loneliness, despair, confusion and a want to lash out...
Very well bridled beast here... It is very easy to become absorbed and let the writing take over but you haven't here. It is harnessed, but still unbroken...
Keep up the great work!
Steve |
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Re: Evanescense
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by lostinmyself on
Wednesday, 26th November 2008 @ 10:47:38 AM AEST
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My dear sweet Dawnie.
You are wrong.
I love you, and I know you. And I love you still.
And as for the poem, you never fail to amaze me; I wish I could write myself out like this.
Hugs to you, my kindred sister,
Phil xxx |
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Re: Evanescense
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by ladyfawn on
Friday, 28th November 2008 @ 05:45:12 PM AEST
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powerfully written, beautifully expressed; i say, write it out,
hugs n' love nessa |
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Re: Evanescense
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 1st December 2008 @ 02:18:49 AM AEST
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While this is a painfully sad write and it also tears at the very fabric of one's soul, I notice that you are at the very least, an outstanding poetess. You have a fantastic way with words that is very amazing. Funny, the first word I thought of was "fantastic" after I read this and thought of what I should put in my comment but obviously, a one word comment is so undeserving and unfair.
You are very creative with your writing. Please, please keep it up.
I hope that whatever is troubling you gets better....soon.
Take care.
Tim
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Re: Evanescense
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 2nd December 2008 @ 10:49:51 AM AEST
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| very sad, very intense, very good. wonderful description as always. |
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Re: Evanescense
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by Sophia on
Friday, 6th November 2009 @ 02:17:42 AM AEST
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Oh my........ you have an INCREDIBLE talent....have you ever had anything published??? you should. You are so amazing i could feel the poem inside my heart...
i only joined yesterday so maybe you could look at mine??? I only have two :)
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