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War#2
Contributed by
richard_campbell
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Thursday, 20th November 2008 @ 11:04:08 AM in AEST
Topic:
anguished
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I don't know how it STARTED
I don't know how it will END
but one thing i KNOW
one side will WIN
many are against IT
many say its SIN
fighting for PEACE,
some-one must WIN.
War,
its not a game FRIEND.
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2008-11-20 11:04:08] (Date/Time posted on
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Re: War#2
(User Rating: 1 ) by gmcse8 on
Thursday, 20th November 2008 @ 02:18:43 PM AEST (User
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I liked the poem. The phrasing was nice and it flowed when I read it. Did you ever consider making that fouth line, "No side will win." Having spent 30 years in the military, it has been my experience, that even if you "Win", no one ever really does. |
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