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The Wounded Girl Revised
Contributed by
gmcse8
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Thursday, 13th November 2008 @ 05:42:14 PM in AEST
Topic:
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Dedicated to a wonderful young woman
A soul broken and scared, gaping wounds in your heart,
amazed your spirit survives, still willing to make a healing start.
Your eyes, windows to your anguish, to your pain,
you are not alone in this battle Stacey Jane.
Together you and I will face the world, take the strain.
It is difficult to watch you struggle with the demons within,
unable to even hug, so hard to let the healing begin.
Fighting doubt, anger, mistakes, losing battles, bad advice,
after each loss, I stand to fight again, once, twice, thrice.
I will fight the good fight, you are worth it, no matter the price.
She nineteen, I sixty five, a chasm broad, can I bridge the divide,
start the mending, try a hug, reasure her by her side I will abide.
doubt, hurt, her doubting me, and I her, always there is the pain,
self preservation tells me to walk away, there is nothing to gain.
No I will be there today, tomorrow, each time beat down, get up again.
Hitting walls, tearing them down, opening emotional doors,
her happy my goal, no matter how hard, or bad the war.
She smiles now, knows the right words and phrases,
happy, content, glad, wanting a hug, happy with her spaces.
Battle won when joy, anger displaces & with a hug, she embraces.
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Re: The Wounded Girl Revised
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 13th November 2008 @ 07:22:29 PM AEST
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This is a wonderful poem, you shouldn't doubt your work, you have talent. Unfortunately I relate more to the broken girl than to yourself. but now at least i know why the people I care about the most tend to leave abruptly.
Great job!
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Re: The Wounded Girl Revised
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by little_genna on
Friday, 14th November 2008 @ 01:02:44 PM AEST
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each poem you write gets better and better. you should not doubt that you have talent. you know how to manipulate words. you have good imagery in this poem just like the other one i read..
personally i prefer the first version of this poem. even if it does appear to be quite wordy.
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Re: The Wounded Girl Revised
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by Jlokitty on
Tuesday, 25th November 2008 @ 07:44:50 PM AEST
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| awww thats really good!! keep it up! wow |
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