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The First Step
Contributed by
funnyface09
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Tuesday, 11th November 2008 @ 04:24:23 AM in AEST
Topic:
SadPoetry
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Time will be my measure
Checking on the tears that flow
Lesser and lesser
With each passing days
Given up on wanting more
Giving in to feeling less
Waves of sadness
Overwhelmed my heart sometimes
So huge that I thought I’d die
Feelings turn to numb
Heart turns to frozen
Broken hearted
Since the day the tears flow
Because of you
For you
The road ahead seems so long and dark
I brave myself to take the first step
Towards forgetting you entirely
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2008-11-11 04:24:23]
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Re: The First Step
(User Rating: 1 )
by MaRyDoNtUwAnNa on
Tuesday, 11th November 2008 @ 02:10:47 PM AEST
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| It is hard to forget someone who meant so much to you. I understand completely. Great poem, very deep and yes it is good to start moving hard, even though it seems impossible to do. |
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Re: The First Step
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by gmcse8 on
Tuesday, 11th November 2008 @ 04:30:59 PM AEST
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I TRY NOT TO COMMENT ON THE MEANING OF THE POEM, ALTHOUGH MOST OF US HAVE BEEN WHERE THAT POEM IS. I DO COMMENT ON THE WAY A POEM IS STUCTURED IF IT INTERESTS ME. YOUR POEM HAD SOME INTERESTING USE OF WORDS. LINES 5 AND 6 ESPECIALLY WERE VERY WELL DONE. IN MY HUMBLE OPINION. "Given up on wanting more
Giving in to feeling less". THAT IS POETRY. THE WORDS BLEND AND ROLL SMOOTHLY OFF THE TONGUE. I WENT BACK SEVERAL TIMES TO READ THOSE LINES AGAIN. GOOD JOB. AND THANKS FOR AN INTERESTING READ.
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