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Enigmatic Verse
Contributed by
springchic1979
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Thursday, 20th March 2003 @ 05:45:00 PM in AEST
Topic:
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You juxtapose what I compose
To 'modern poetry'
Then have the gall to say that all
My works seem too prosy.
Synchronously, expecting me
To annotate my prose,
To justify, and reason why
I used each word I chose.
Well cease assault! It's not my fault
You cannot comprehend
Each complex word which was scattered
Throughout the lines I penned.
Every quatrain is not inane--
Just cryptic periphrase.
Invest the time; inspect each rhyme.
You may just be amazed.
I'm not contrite for how I write
Nor how my poems sound.
To those of you who misconstrue
My mind I shall expound--
This brain of mine likes to combine
My thoughts haphazardly
And to explain I must maintain
Present prolixity.
Plainly using common wording
Is easy to perceive;
Circumspection and perfection
Are harder to achieve.
I cannot cringe from that challenge
Involving intellect.
Poems derive when I contrive
Ways to be indirect.
Being concise will not suffice
If I impart my soul.
Profound oceans of emotions
Inundate self-control.
Yet still I strive to keep alive
Some form of temperance
And do portray each livelong day
A mien of adamance.
Though I appear to be austere
I am not carved from stone.
Those who know me will guarantee
I'm made of flesh and bone.
So do take heed-- if stabbed, I'll bleed
And I'll become quite terse.
I wont keep crude feelings subdued.
All wounds I shall reverse.
I must decree it's not easy
To keep my temper cloaked
But I intend to condescend
ONLY if I'm provoked.
So let's confer what you prefer.
I'd really like to know
If talent, time, rhythm, and rhyme
Is what I should bestow.
Exemplify. Just how should I
Attempt to explain 'me'?
How should I choose which words to use
To cease verbosity?
I do agree my poetry
Is seldom understood,
But honestly, I write for ME
(As any poet should.)
To be forthright-- abstruse insight
Is not a mental curse...
It helps conceal each pained ordeal
In enigmatic verse.
Yvonne Denise Springer
Copyright ©2003 Yvonne Denise Springer
Copyright ©
springchic1979
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Re: Enigmatic Verse
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by DreamWeaver on
Thursday, 20th March 2003 @ 08:27:54 PM AEST
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| Dearest Yvonne ... There are way too many weeks between the posting of your poems ... if I have to wait so long again you will incur my wrath :))) This has to be the most brilliant angry poem that I have read to date ... awesome in its content, R&R, vocabulary, flow, humour, sarcasm, getting your point across that stings like a bee (I love that) ... absolutely splendiferous ... take a bow ... Jan |
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Re: Enigmatic Verse
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 21st March 2003 @ 07:35:33 AM AEST
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I totally agree with the comment above. If thought don't necessarily come in a rationalised, ordered way - why should poetry. I am a strong believer that poetry doesn't have to rhyme, be in set lines or even verses. It is whatever you want it to be and not everyone will appreciate it but for those that criticise there will be another person who's life it deeply touches.
It is always good to get feedback but don't change the way you write just becuase one or two people don't like your work. I may not "like" all the poetry on this site but I appreciate it all and realise that it is the result of a lot of hard work from the author.
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Re: Enigmatic Verse
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by springchic1979 on
Friday, 21st March 2003 @ 01:13:02 PM AEST
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Dear Jan,
Thank you for the compliment. It pleases me to no end to know that you anticipate my posts!
Though I have been writing for years, I do not have a stash of poetry. It normally takes me WEEKS of sleepless nights to write one poem. Maybe if I can chalk up enough courage I might post some of my older stuff one day.
However, since I do not desire to arouse your anger so I must endeavor to hasten my posts. :)
Yvonne
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Re: Enigmatic Verse
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by springchic1979 on
Friday, 21st March 2003 @ 01:28:46 PM AEST
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I agree with you sleepless_siren, not all poetry has to rhyme. I have read many wonderful, touching pieces from poets on this site (and other sites) that had no rhyme and meter.
In fact I wrote a poem (and posted it here) about how much I envy those who write that way...how they never have to go back and obsess over what they have written, how they express their heart and soul so vividly, how I wish I could sometimes escape what it is that makes me dwell on each verse.
I think you summed it up with your line of advice...
It is whatever you want it to be and not everyone will appreciate it but for those that criticise there will be another person who's life it deeply touches.
I couldn't have worded that any better. :)
Yvonne
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Re: Enigmatic Verse
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by wolfflow on
Friday, 21st March 2003 @ 02:02:01 PM AEST
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| another masterpiece, oozing with class and attitude and a brilliance of thought shining through, if the sun ever ceases we can always use your poetry to illuminate our way |
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Re: Enigmatic Verse
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by karoody on
Friday, 21st March 2003 @ 05:07:31 PM AEST
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| you wrote this with strong conviction. your words show much strength and talent. ignore anyone who says otherwise. |
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Re: Enigmatic Verse
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by ladyfawn on
Saturday, 22nd March 2003 @ 11:14:10 AM AEST
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| excellent write, i love it:) huggs always nessa |
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Re: Enigmatic Verse
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by springchic1979 on
Saturday, 22nd March 2003 @ 08:46:42 PM AEST
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thank you for your comment Wolfflow, that was very sweet. :)
*hugs*
Yvonne |
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Re: Enigmatic Verse
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by springchic1979 on
Saturday, 22nd March 2003 @ 08:48:02 PM AEST
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Thank you very much Karoody. :)
Yvonne |
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Re: Enigmatic Verse
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by springchic1979 on
Saturday, 22nd March 2003 @ 08:49:43 PM AEST
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Thank you for the compliment, Nessa.
*hugs*
Yvonne |
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Re: Enigmatic Verse
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by etherealgurl on
Sunday, 25th May 2003 @ 08:20:05 PM AEST
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| wow! I have sooo been there! what is wonderful about this poem is how you exploited all the hooks to get your point across.... rythem, rhyme, structure and conciseness... all the things that your critic says you lack....genious! |
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Re: Enigmatic Verse
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by springchic1979 on
Monday, 26th May 2003 @ 09:58:30 PM AEST
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Thank you for the wonderful compliment etherealgurl. You are very kind.
I don't mind if people don't like my poetry because of its structure, content, or wording... that is fine...
but for somebody to say that the way I write shouldn't be considered "poetry" at all...well I consider those to be fighting words....lol.
Anyway, thank you for taking the time to read and for leaving me such a sweet response.
Yvonne |
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Re: Enigmatic Verse
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by Lionel on
Wednesday, 17th March 2004 @ 03:27:18 PM AEST
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| Touche'. Let me See your wrath. If you haven't published a book of your poems; you should. |
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Re: Enigmatic Verse
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by remote on
Tuesday, 27th September 2005 @ 09:04:40 AM AEST
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| Er.., hmm |
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