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My Tear Stains mixed with Your Pain
Contributed by
little_genna
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Monday, 3rd November 2008 @ 04:22:18 PM in AEST
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I am not the one for you.
I know within myself this is true.
My thoughts were taken from you with such ease.
I hear you cry "wait, please!"
I walked away,
You heard what I had to say.
But you scream "it can't be true!"
I can no longer say I love you.
DP
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Re: My Tear Stains mixed with Your Pain
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by emystar on
Monday, 3rd November 2008 @ 04:56:39 PM AEST
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Very powerfull write.
Luv it.
huggs, smiles,
emy |
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Re: My Tear Stains mixed with Your Pain
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by Voice of the Silent on
Monday, 3rd November 2008 @ 06:27:30 PM AEST
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Short but strong
and powerful
saying so much with so little
short poems are always great I love them
This is sad some what but very good |
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Re: My Tear Stains mixed with Your Pain
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by karoody on
Tuesday, 4th November 2008 @ 02:12:23 PM AEST
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sometimes we just know it's time to walk away
sad as it may be, painful as it may be
funny how those writes just come out of us sometimes, isn't it?
Glad this one came from you
take care
kara |
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Re: My Tear Stains mixed with Your Pain
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by gmcse8 on
Thursday, 6th November 2008 @ 01:26:58 PM AEST
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| You at least remain true to form. You write when you are unhappy or feeling bad, or are in pain. One day I trust I will see a happy poem..... who knows, stranger things have happened. Now the poem. I think the last two lines of the first stanza are simply remarkable. I found myself reading them over and over again, thinking about them. The realization of what you felt when you wrote the 3rd line is clear. It is however outdone by the poignant plea at the end of the 4th line. I expect everyone has had the feelings that cause one to say, "wait, please". It is such a strong two word phrase I found that each time I read the poem, I paused there each time and reread those words before moving on to the 2nd stanza. This short poem is very powerful and moving and some of the best you have written. |
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Re: My Tear Stains mixed with Your Pain
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 8th November 2008 @ 10:01:32 PM AEST
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| This is a heartbreaking yet powerful poem. Keep up the great work! |
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Re: My Tear Stains mixed with Your Pain
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by Mangs on
Monday, 10th November 2008 @ 11:59:32 AM AEST
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| Princess..
you just know when a relationship's nearing its end... and although it feels as if you are cutting away a part of your body thats decayed, its necessary to do it in order to survive... there are no options... and it doesnt always feel right. but you have to know its the right thing to do.
love always...
Umang. |
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