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Life of a Spider
Contributed by
black-thorn
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Saturday, 1st November 2008 @ 04:26:20 AM in AEST
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Have I been seen?
I'll risk a small crawl.
I need to get to the corner,
I could lose it all.
I scurry a bit more,
I'm almost there!
Just keep on moving,
I hope i won't scare.
Oh no! Someone's screamed.
I'll stop and look round.
I won't move a muscle,
I shan't make a sound.
Somebody's coming toward me,
glass in her hand,
I let down some silk;
Get me safely to land!
Woe is me! Stuck in a glass.
Looking up at my fresh uneaten flies.
This life of a spider's,
Is a sad life of mine.
Copyright ©
black-thorn
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2008-11-01 04:26:20]
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Re: Life of a Spider
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by heartfelt on
Saturday, 1st November 2008 @ 09:15:03 AM AEST
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| really nice with this one. a little story telling always goes nice with poetry! |
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Re: Life of a Spider
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by lost_chadow on
Saturday, 1st November 2008 @ 03:06:43 PM AEST
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| I like how you took it from a different perspective, but I feel like you could have don't more with it, gone into more detail or given a more extensive story. |
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Re: Life of a Spider
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by Jenni_K on
Saturday, 1st November 2008 @ 11:10:41 PM AEST
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I've always enjoyed personification and you did well with this... Thank you for sharing this...
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Re: Life of a Spider
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by Ambivalence on
Saturday, 1st November 2008 @ 11:59:42 PM AEST
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interesting perspective...havent thot of spiders that way. i'll try to be nicer to them more often (i'm kinda scared of em haha) nice piece. take care
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