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Self Doubt at Midnight
Contributed by
Rakerman1999
on
Wednesday, 29th October 2008 @ 10:04:53 PM in AEST
Topic:
selfstruggles
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Unto the stars I lift my eyes
Unto the darkness spill my sighs
A better man might kneel to pray
But I have little left to say
And so inside myself are kept
The countless tears that I have wept
For weeping is a private thing
That shuns the pity it might bring
So I will lie with eyes of red
Through sleepless nights upon my bed
And wonder what tomorrow brings
Another hurt or better things
But better things come few and slowly
And I am useless,
lost
and lowly
With little chance to find my way
Before the night succumbs to day
L. Carling c 2008
Copyright ©
Rakerman1999
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2008-10-29 22:04:53]
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Re: Self Doubt at Midnight
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by Recyclebin on
Wednesday, 29th October 2008 @ 11:30:14 PM AEST
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This is a stunning write.
~Bin~
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Re: Self Doubt at Midnight
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 29th October 2008 @ 11:31:57 PM AEST
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*hugs you, sensing you could use one*
Larry, it is always such an extreme pleasure when you visit YPDC and leave us with one of your scribblings.
This is so touching I can hardly find words in which to express my sincerest admiration. You have always had
the ability to extract an emotion, but in this one, you've sweetly caressed it until it can bear the kindness no longer.
Like saying, "I haven't done anything to warrant your attention, so I'm just going to curl up here at your feet...and
admire you from the base of my soul." Not sure if that made much sense, but your poems tend to wreck havoc
with my sensibilities ...ah ... frequently.
Excellent write, friend, as always.
*a bouquet of autumn spilled leaves*
for the giver of roses ...
~ Breezy
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Re: Self Doubt at Midnight
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by shelby on
Wednesday, 29th October 2008 @ 11:47:12 PM AEST
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oh my rose man is so damn sad.
Whats up with you sweety?
I am glad you came back even for a moment.
I just turned this thing on and here you are. Lovely poem but so dang sad. I miss you. What can I do to make you feel better??
For now a huge hug (the special kind) a kiss and a rose with a daisy.
love you
Michelle |
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Re: Self Doubt at Midnight
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by Ambivalence on
Wednesday, 29th October 2008 @ 11:52:26 PM AEST
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very precise, poignant piece...theres no shame in tears, crying is good, even for guys (what i call real men). even if we might tend to feel lost at times, we eventually find the way. trust yourself, and u will sleep without a doubt in your mind again. take care
-K.Z. |
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Re: Self Doubt at Midnight
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by heartfelt on
Wednesday, 29th October 2008 @ 11:57:41 PM AEST
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| very beautiful! |
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Re: Self Doubt at Midnight
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by Jenni_K on
Thursday, 30th October 2008 @ 12:18:19 AM AEST
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Oh Larry, this is gut-wrenching..... yet you always manage to put your thoughts across so beautifully... a very emotionally charged poem.... Hope this is fictional..and if not, then I pray that the morning brings some sunshine to you...
Hugs
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Re: Self Doubt at Midnight
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 30th October 2008 @ 08:48:16 AM AEST
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Even with all the sadness and desolation, it is good to see your write here. I hope that this was just the bluest part of your day, but know that you have many friends here that support you, myself included.
I look forward to reading more of your splendid works!
Barkeep!! |
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Re: Self Doubt at Midnight
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by zenith66 on
Thursday, 30th October 2008 @ 11:48:28 PM AEST
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i agree with all the comments this is wonderfully penned, i dont see you here much but your talent is obvious, a stunningly versed piece, amazing flow and potent emotional impact, brilliant and very very much appreciated!!
keep it up!! |
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Re: Self Doubt at Midnight
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by Spike on
Monday, 3rd November 2008 @ 05:58:46 AM AEST
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Serapax will kill that creating pain, Larry- at least till morning.
These lines are an actual embodiment of suffering and regret, and too bloody familiar, this ache.
Spike |
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Re: Self Doubt at Midnight
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by ladyfawn on
Monday, 1st December 2008 @ 12:58:02 AM AEST
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absolutely beautiful larry, i hope all is well with you,
hugs n' love nessa
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