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Forever and a Day
Contributed by
eternal_sorrows
on
Tuesday, 28th October 2008 @ 02:40:11 AM in AEST
Topic:
Grief
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I woke up this morning
thinking of you
reached for your warmth
as I always would do.
Your side of the bed
was empty with fold
pillows in place
untouched and cold.
I did not smell coffee
the news was not on
things seem so different
since you are gone.
Your sweet smelling scent
is fading away
so I cling to your memory
in every possible way.
Motivating myself
is a struggle to do
hard to see sunshine
when feeling so blue.
They say it gets better
as time goes by
to look for the good
at least give it a try.
Something happened
at work today
I started to call you
right away.
Sadly remembering
I hung up the phone
you were not there
God took you home.
My heart is hurting
my soul cries with pain
I've got nothing to lose
got nothing to gain.
Time is one asset
I have plenty to spare
holding on tight
going nowhere.
I'm looking for good
as I have been told
reaching for warmth
yet, shiver with cold.
Darling, I miss you
in every way
and still loving you
"Forever and a Day."
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eternal_sorrows
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2008-10-28 02:40:11]
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Re: Forever and a Day
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by audaudaud on
Tuesday, 28th October 2008 @ 06:39:25 AM AEST
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Wow, that was a very nice piece. I really hope that it would be turned into a song, and only in that way will it do the poem justice. Well, i think it may not be easy for readers to feel the sadness since the each line is rather short. Do you think it will be better if the sentences are longer so that it is more slow and draggy?
But anyway, i liked the rhyming alot. :) |
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Re: Forever and a Day
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by navydocny on
Tuesday, 28th October 2008 @ 11:21:52 AM AEST
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Devastating..
You bring a sense that a lot of writers leave out. Smell. Its our strongest emotional and memory trigger. I suffer the pain of loss, not of death but of love. There is finality with death and sadly closure at some point, at least for some, but not for all.
Thank you for sharing this very fragile and beautiful poem...
Steve |
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Re: Forever and a Day
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by LoveStruck_Hippie on
Tuesday, 28th October 2008 @ 03:48:33 PM AEST
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A very beautiful and painful piece. Thank you for sharing a piece of your soul. May you find comfort and peace in the many friends here at YPDC.
Love & Friendship
Peace
~Shannon |
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Re: Forever and a Day
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by jcvamp on
Thursday, 27th November 2008 @ 06:41:19 AM AEST
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| That's beautiful and a fitting tribute. Very sad. |
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