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Composing Freedom
Contributed by
karoody
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Thursday, 23rd October 2008 @ 12:44:19 PM in AEST
Topic:
Lifepoems
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Freedom to you
Means space all around
But sometimes we find
A stranger's irony
That in searching for freedom
Those few who see differently
Minds bent by the world
Choosing incarceration
While a world turns away
Unable to understand
Why the request was placed
How one can ask for less space
A limited freedom
Society turns that person away
Assuming they know better
Thus, insanity runs rampart
But, not all...
Some learn to be strong
Squirrel themselves away
Because strength takes time
Alike as we seem
Some push space more slowly
Some vent in vain
Some ask for help
And still watch in desperation
As most of the world again turns away
Unable to understand
But not all...
Copyright ©
karoody
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2008-10-23 12:44:19]
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Re: Composing Freedom
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by outlawpoet on
Thursday, 23rd October 2008 @ 01:49:13 PM AEST
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| this is a great poem i like it and agree with the content at hand. im still learning to write free verse so i hope i can learn from your writing style. |
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Re: Composing Freedom
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 23rd October 2008 @ 03:05:03 PM AEST
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| It was an honor to write with you. A strong message. I think it turned out great! |
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Re: Composing Freedom
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by Crow on
Thursday, 23rd October 2008 @ 07:37:10 PM AEST
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| Kara and Jecks..very well written, I know what the world thinks and says..I also know the sanity this write points out. every good thought from Me to both of you.... Lane |
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Re: Composing Freedom
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by Lenore_Poe15 on
Friday, 24th October 2008 @ 09:00:43 AM AEST
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I really like it. The over all message is very strong, I'm not sure why but I like how you put the word squirrel in there, fit very well.
-Love Lenore |
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Re: Composing Freedom
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by Voice of the Silent on
Friday, 24th October 2008 @ 10:46:23 PM AEST
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great write you two make an excellent team
-kelly |
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Re: Composing Freedom
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by The_Phantom on
Saturday, 25th October 2008 @ 01:29:19 AM AEST
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Bravo to you both a great write, a strong message, two great poets what more could you ask for. well done.
The Phantom |
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Re: Composing Freedom
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by Jenni_K on
Saturday, 25th October 2008 @ 10:30:21 PM AEST
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A profound write!! So well put together by two of ypdc's best.... Good going, guys..
Hugs
Jenni |
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Re: Composing Freedom
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by exiled on
Thursday, 30th October 2008 @ 11:10:34 PM AEST
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| I really enjoyed this write...thanks for sharing it Karoody...how you been? |
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Re: Composing Freedom
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by Robert_Edgar_Burns on
Thursday, 30th October 2008 @ 11:30:52 PM AEST
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Do you realize that many martyr's for the faith have found freedom
even when incarcerated in tiny spaces, just as the Disciples of
Christ experienced? And the Scriptures say, If the Spirit has set
you free, ye shall be free indeed! Yet, they were prisoners.
Very provocative and thought producing write. A great job by you both.
Blessings,
Robert Edgar "Lawdog" Burns |
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