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Are you still there
Contributed by
outlawpoet
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Tuesday, 21st October 2008 @ 04:47:13 PM in AEST
Topic:
LostLove
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I see you in the corner you're standing against the wall
I have seen you through the good times and the bad
But I have never let fall
I have seen you dancing in the moon light with ribbons in your hair
Though you could not see my face you still knew I was there
Cause I have seen you through your safety
And cleared your way through danger
So why is it that when you look into my eyes
you suddenly see a stranger?
Baby, maybe you have lost your mind
Or maybe someone has stolen your soul
Maybe you have lost your vision
Or maybe this is your way of letting go
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2008-10-21 16:47:13]
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Re: Are you still there
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by shelby on
Tuesday, 21st October 2008 @ 10:45:18 PM AEST
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My friend,
very good write and yes I do relate oh yes.
I always have enjoyed your honesty and the way your words flow. Nicely done.
You know how to reach me if you want to talk.
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Re: Are you still there
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by karoody on
Wednesday, 22nd October 2008 @ 08:58:40 AM AEST
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I could relate for sure. this was very moving. thank you for sharing this with us.
Smiles
Kara |
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Re: Are you still there
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by allforyou on
Thursday, 23rd October 2008 @ 07:15:55 PM AEST
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the last four lines of this are really powerful, in my opinion. i like how it starts off with a possitive vibe, a feeling of admiration and love, and ends with hurt (which i'm sorry ur hurting, but u must admit pain makes for great literature). i want more. write more!! more!!!
:o) i'm not becoming a fan, i am one
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