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The One You Know
Contributed by
Spike
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Thursday, 16th October 2008 @ 07:24:36 AM in AEST
Topic:
EmotionalPoetry
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when you crawl into that hole
where only one can fit
when you gaze into the distance
and tell me this is it
when you draw deep into self
and disconnect from all
damn
I’ll be there when you come to life,
and catch you when you fall.
as you suffer all the trials
that conscience will inflict
and live through all the trauma
that one life can collect
to run a rampant course
of rage and grief and pain
sigh
when you make that lonely call,
I’ll take you back again.
though you sink into the bottle
while you raise an angry fist
to blame me for your failures
and the chances that you’ve missed
tomorrow you’ll be sober
and crippled with remorse
oh well
and happy just to have you back,
I’ll bear all this and worse.
Copyright ©
Spike
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2008-10-16 07:24:36]
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Re: The One You Know
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by karoody on
Thursday, 16th October 2008 @ 08:14:15 AM AEST
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ahhhh.
that unconditional love! about time it was drawn this way....thank you for this. i loved reading this. very elegantly written. i applaud you on the write and the love and soul in it!
thank you again, spike!
love and blessings
kara
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Re: The One You Know
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 17th October 2008 @ 11:45:45 AM AEST
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The three single italicized lines in this piece are one heck of a nice touch.
Quite artistically done. |
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Re: The One You Know
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by shelby on
Saturday, 18th October 2008 @ 12:40:26 AM AEST
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You always bring out such emotion in your poetry.
I truly loved this write.......
Which part I like best cannot pick entire write emotive and moved me.
Hugs
Michelle |
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Re: The One You Know
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 18th October 2008 @ 05:11:54 PM AEST
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Spike, my friend, you quite simply amaze me sometimes. I, not unlike my friend Jecks,
applaud the italicized lines. To me, they are like the inner voice we never speak aloud.
(and yes yes, captain obvious IS my middle name, for your big fat information! lol ).
I love this so much that I wish to claim it fully for my own. There is so much
intimately detailed here, that could have just as easily fell from my pen. When
you bare a soul, you leave NOTHING untouched. I SO like that about you. A
tell-it-exactly-as-it-is kinda guy. (You can always surprise me)
Brilliance never shone so bright, my dear friend. Hope your "spring" is sweet.
Enjoy the days (and the moon filled nights)
~ Breezy
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Re: The One You Know
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by emystar on
Sunday, 19th October 2008 @ 09:39:38 PM AEST
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Spike this is a beautifull, precious write.
Good work.
Huggs, blessings,
emy |
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Re: The One You Know
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 22nd October 2008 @ 03:44:34 AM AEST
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Ah, the things we do for love. I like this... a fine poem about love and devotion. A bit of torture sometimes, is it not?
Take care,
Tim |
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Re: The One You Know
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by elle on
Wednesday, 29th October 2008 @ 05:42:12 PM AEST
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| it is no small thing to be loyal. . . sometimes it seems heavy, like thunder. . . simply loving another, regardless of apparent lack. . . of consequence. . . my mind turns to days, forgotten & easily I can relive this past. . . always waiting. . . just to love & somehow to release the pain. . . I feel you've captured the still moment of love entertaining eternity. how painfully beautiful. . . & beautifully painful. elle |
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