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A dark cloud
Contributed by
shelby
on
Monday, 13th October 2008 @ 06:58:23 PM in AEST
Topic:
SadPoetry
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Be wary oh messenger of sorrow.
The Gods may not reach from the sky,
to snatch you up and save you
for they know that you lie.
You, that one dark cloud
trying to smother the brightness,
cause the day to end sooner
bring shadows of your forbidden pain.
Striking the innocence
skirted behind false beliefs
and a town full of people brainwashed,
false smiles, fake blood.
Slither away,
lie on your lips
a testimony to all
that you are above the law.
Copyright ©
shelby
... [
2008-10-13 18:58:23] (Date/Time posted on
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Re: A dark cloud
(User Rating: 1 ) by karoody on
Monday, 13th October 2008 @ 11:29:20 PM AEST (User
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((((michelle))))
You wrote that so powerfully. I am so proud of you for writing such a graceful peice about this. I could not have done so. Not really sure of anyone who can. Awesome picture as well. It compliments this write splendidly.
Loves ya so much
Karabear |
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Re: A dark cloud
(User Rating: 1 ) by Lilymaemax on
Tuesday, 14th October 2008 @ 10:04:14 AM AEST (User
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Hi hope your driving safely.I always look forward to your poems so versatile.Truly lovely imagery thank you.Lilymae |
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Re: A dark cloud
(User Rating: 1 ) by zenith66 on
Tuesday, 14th October 2008 @ 03:59:50 PM AEST (User
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wow there is such a dangerous brilliance to this, such an amazing picture here as well, you really draged me in with your writing, an fabulous 3rd verse and i totally agree adn enjoyed it, such a power to the 4th, and the final line was just wow, sorry if im rushing got to go, great write, fantastic work!!! |
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Re: A dark cloud
(User Rating: 1 ) by Crow on
Wednesday, 15th October 2008 @ 12:39:47 AM AEST (User
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I know what your feeling writing this piece hon..super pic...Lane |
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Re: A dark cloud
(User Rating: 1 ) by Former_Member on
Friday, 17th October 2008 @ 11:52:15 AM AEST (User
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Very powerful. It even has a different flavor than your last few writes. |
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