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CHAINS
Contributed by
karoody
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Wednesday, 8th October 2008 @ 06:45:59 AM in AEST
Topic:
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i can paint my soul different colors
if that's what it takes
for some peace around you
i've tried all my life
to know compassion in your world
it's almost funny
the things we'll go through
for the ones we love
but i stopped laughing
because i'm feeling sick now
and it's getting tiring
living this lie
just to see you smile
when you don't even know
what color my soul really is
Copyright ©
karoody
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2008-10-08 06:45:59]
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Re: CHAINS
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by wizard on
Wednesday, 8th October 2008 @ 07:09:26 AM AEST
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sounds like its time to live in 'your own world',
nicely done,
wiz |
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Re: CHAINS
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by NoSaint on
Wednesday, 8th October 2008 @ 11:04:51 AM AEST
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I know it is tough...but you my friend are a flower of the rarest kind and I know you will come through even this darkest hour
Shari |
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by shelby on
Wednesday, 8th October 2008 @ 02:22:13 PM AEST
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Kara,
I know how hard this is. I understand your feelings deeply. The feeling of heart sick, that is the hardest.
Hugs
Michelle
Do not live the lie there are some you will never make happy. You be the person that you are the problem rests with them hun. Besides, dont sweat the small stuff till you sit on a tack!!!! ROFLMAO |
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by Crow on
Wednesday, 8th October 2008 @ 06:00:36 PM AEST
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| walking away from anything is easier said than done, one`s you love? thats a hard case. wishing you every bit of the best..Lane |
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Re: CHAINS
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by Ambivalence on
Wednesday, 8th October 2008 @ 06:14:31 PM AEST
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a true write...u just can't be someone else to make another happy. The lies will creep up slowly and u will surely fall deep down. hope u will make the right choice. take care
-K.Z. |
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Re: CHAINS
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 8th October 2008 @ 07:05:46 PM AEST
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This one speaks volumes!!!! It makes no sense to give it your all in any type relationship when the other person or people can't even ever take the time to get to know you. It's very unfortunate when that happens and it's sad... but true. Some people really suck. You don't deserve any of that ****. You are an awesome caring sweetheart and don't ever forget it.
Once again, you have captured so much emotion in such short verse. Powerful!
Loves ya to infinity and beyond.
*freaking huge hug*
Tim
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by Jenni_K on
Wednesday, 8th October 2008 @ 10:47:40 PM AEST
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Don't let those chains hold you down, Hun.. Life is there for the living..embrace it!!
hugs
Jenni |
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Re: CHAINS
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by Eternal_Dreamer on
Thursday, 9th October 2008 @ 01:35:15 AM AEST
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Dearest Kara,
I know it's hard hun, but I have seen how much
of a strong woman you are. You are incredible.
Don't let anybody hold you back sweetie. You
are a wonderful sweet soul who deserves so
much love & respect~ People can be so cruel,
unkind and very selfish. It's your turn to shine
my dear friend. Take the spotlight and don't look
back.
A well captured emotional piece of writing.
With the utmost admiration & love,
dreamer |
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by twick on
Thursday, 9th October 2008 @ 05:04:32 AM AEST
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so reading this seemed very cryptic and had me wondering if I know who you're talking about. Either way I see you're looking for understanding and so far in my life I've yet to find it even among my very best friends. But life is that journey of searching and some are more cautious than others not to bruise or ruffle feathers along the way.
you are who you are Kara and you shouldn't feel the need to pretend to be something you aren't even to put a smile on someone's face. Those real friends will stick around even if it seems like they deserted you it make just take awhile for them to come around. Stay strong! Love ya. |
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 9th October 2008 @ 07:39:47 AM AEST
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wow, kara. The last two lines are TREMENDOUS! And so relatable. Damn.
I wish like heck you didn't have to endure this kind of thing. I think you
have more strength than most people I know. It is wonderful that
you can express your emotion so seemingly effortlessly. I hope it helps,
even if just slightly. ^_^
*hugs*
~ Breezy
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by navydocny on
Thursday, 9th October 2008 @ 12:38:17 PM AEST
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It will never stop astounding me what we'll go through to just be near someone that we love. The things that we will put up with, say or do. This prostration to some would signal a need to acknowledge the other, but not all get the message. They see it as weakness, or even just plain foolery...
Always be positive...Always be yourself...Your reward will come....
Great write as always Kara!
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 11th October 2008 @ 03:03:45 AM AEST
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" and it's getting tiring living
this lie just to see you smile
when you don't even know
what color my soul really is "
A powerful emotional relese
the above verse conveys, an
ironic twist on the preverbial
caml before the storm, in this
case, it seems to have come
after the storm, A beautiful
write even though sad . . .
Ben . . .
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Re: CHAINS
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by Recyclebin on
Saturday, 11th October 2008 @ 07:59:09 PM AEST
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The color of my soul... that is deep. The foundation of the poem. Very good write. Well damn good.
Later Bin |
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 17th October 2008 @ 08:38:44 AM AEST
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| I wrote something that says much the same as this, but in a different way. I can relate to this ...unfortunately.... |
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Re: CHAINS
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by Lovingangel4u on
Saturday, 18th October 2008 @ 03:14:34 PM AEST
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Hi Kara
Can relate to this really well, Im in there and no way out. Its very hard to leave and very hard to exists in this situation and as you know it belts us down. We dont love ourselves enough I get told. ummm wonder..
Sounds like you have been through a lot in your life too. Thank you for your lovely comments on my poems.
Angels with you
~Carmen~ |
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by emystar on
Sunday, 19th October 2008 @ 08:59:01 PM AEST
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I hear ya friend.
I can totally relate from my past.
Good work even tho it's very sad.
huggs, blessings,
emy |
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Re: CHAINS
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by outlawpoet on
Monday, 20th October 2008 @ 02:23:04 PM AEST
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| wow this is moving i value the simplicity the fact that i read this and know exactly what you were talking about |
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Re: CHAINS
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by CrimsonTears on
Tuesday, 4th November 2008 @ 08:40:58 PM AEST
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I know this feeling all too well.
you have expressed these emotions so well.
Amazing write. i really enjoyed it!!
Lots of love
CrimsonTears
P.S. Thank you soo much for the comment on my new poem! |
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