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Sudden Madness
Contributed by
solidsnake116
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Wednesday, 1st October 2008 @ 04:14:28 PM in AEST
Topic:
psychoticpoems
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I can't stand my pointless life anymore
think i'll end it at the local liquor store
smoked some pcp before i walked through the door
i left some punk headless and dead on the floor
i then walked about a block to the elementary school
went to the band recital and i gutted some fools
i chopped a little kiddies head off and i took it with me
wasn't the first, won't be the last of my killin spree
walked into an arby's and stuck some lady in the gut
she said you stabbed me! i said yeah? well so friggin what
blew some guys brains all over the glass
then i looked out side and saw cops on the grass
i tried run but they gunned me down
i went to the ground as round after round
tear into my flesh and all i hear is the sound
of my motha frickin blood flyin all around
and as i laid there and waited to die
all i could do was let out a final sigh
i didn't kill enough. i only killed a few
cause now im going to hell instead of that heavenly blue
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Re: Sudden Madness
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by 66697177 on
Thursday, 2nd October 2008 @ 02:06:16 AM AEST
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| hmmm...you have some meter problems in this one, and the imagery could be a bit more creative. Keep working on it...it could be cool, just isn't there quite yet. |
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Re: Sudden Madness
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by ddannyc on
Thursday, 2nd October 2008 @ 04:29:30 AM AEST
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| Its not the race of people the race it self.The race of greed,the race to the top.keep love in your heat. and fear on the floor.with respect to the sky. |
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