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Tell All and Lie
Contributed by
poetic_punk
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Tuesday, 30th September 2008 @ 10:30:40 PM in AEST
Topic:
abstract
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Lightning strikes as time goes by
Dark clouds fill the frightened sky
Toughts of fleeting feelings forever mine
Such dark shadows fall upon thin lines
I spy upon thee with brocken eyes
A smile from you lips tells all and lies
When undue gratitude falls upon your face
Does it hurt to take your own place
If you die today who will you replace?
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Re: Tell All and Lie
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by karoody on
Wednesday, 1st October 2008 @ 12:42:36 AM AEST
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| very bold! Especially that last line! I love that! I've read this a few times and i keep getting different emotions and ideas. it's very provoking for so few words for me. this is cool. |
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Re: Tell All and Lie
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 24th October 2008 @ 11:14:36 PM AEST
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| very powerful very well written |
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Re: Tell All and Lie
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by Voice of the Silent on
Friday, 24th October 2008 @ 11:57:07 PM AEST
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| very strong witting needs spell check though for only one word I can see but well written |
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